Author Topic: Call Mulligan's Studio (short story review & critique)  (Read 2824 times)

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Re: Call Mulligan's Studio (short story review & critique)
« Reply #15 on: January 31, 2007, 01:41:52 PM »
Thanks for the constructive critique, Fett.   As I was typing the story after many years, I came across a few (more than a few) places where it could (and will) be done better. 

Your comments on the overuse of certain words brought back memories of a critique of the manuscript of my novel by an 11 year old, very precocious young man, who read the entire book in 2 days and pointed out to me my overuse of the word  'blurt'.  I did a word search on Word and found that I'd used it nine times.   In my reply to him, i wrote,  "OK!" I blurted out.  "I'll remove the word!"  And then I did so.