Author Topic: Your eyes  (Read 380 times)

Offline Vork

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Your eyes
« on: May 13, 2021, 01:03:08 PM »
I wrote this poem a few months ago for my boyfriend. He has bright blue eyes I'm obsessed with so I decided to write about them. Hope you like it :)

Under the shade of a dormant tree
The soft grass felt like a pillow
I lay as I watched peacefully
The slow swing of the willow

I heard the faint buzz of a bee
And the distant cows bellow
The nearby trickle of the stream
Sounded oh so mellow

I've never felt so free,
Bathing in warm beams of yellow
There was nothing I couldn't see
Gazing at the sights below

Tall trees swayed in the spring breeze,
The remote mountains were covered in snow.
Right there in front of me
Everything seemed to glow

I could see every tump, hillock and rise
Every mound, slope and elevation
That's when golden light hit my eyes
And I lost my perception

Under the shade of a dormant tree
There's no better situation
Amber streaks seeped between the leaves
And lit up the ocean

The sun adorned the gilded sea
As it sunk into the horizon
When I saw the azure skies
Was when I realized
That the thing that left me so mesmerized
Were actually your eyes
« Last Edit: May 13, 2021, 01:53:14 PM by Vork »

Offline Sirena_321

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Re: Your eyes
« Reply #1 on: May 13, 2021, 08:24:00 PM »
@Vork...this is beautiful. Itís so descriptive, and it sounds like you really love your boyfriend...I hope you shared this with him, because I think he would love it. I hope that one day I meet someone who makes me feel this way. Do you mind me asking how long you guys have been together? Best of luck to the both of you!
ďJust because itís whatís done doesnít mean itís what should be done.Ē-Cinderella (2015)

Offline Vork

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Re: Your eyes
« Reply #2 on: May 14, 2021, 02:32:33 AM »
@Sirena_321, thank you so much for that wonderful reply.  It makes me really happy knowing that someone liked my poem so much. I did show it to him and he liked it but he isn't super emotional (which is fine I wrote it for fun). We've been dating for two years now and I hope I can write more poems like this one.
Thanks again, replies like these are what inspire me and keep me writing. See you soon
« Last Edit: May 14, 2021, 02:40:47 AM by Vork »

Offline whiterain

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Re: Your eyes
« Reply #3 on: September 23, 2021, 10:46:08 PM »
When i began to read this I didn't realize how much i seemed tense

reading this unraveled me into a cool warm and comforting place
it was very enjoyable
thank you for sharing