Author Topic: The Fire Within  (Read 125 times)

Offline Dar_Var

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The Fire Within
« on: March 12, 2021, 06:08:12 PM »
Oh! The fierce fire’s flames flew freely,

fluently flowing and fluttering with finesse,

while flickering its fickle flame frequently,

as its flare flips and forms a fortress,

and forces out the freezing fear finely.

 

Oh! The bursting blaze burns brightly,

Bringing belief and bestowing bravery,

And building the broken bricks and bailey,

Boasting, buried beneath, the brimming beauty,


-Sudarshan

Offline Dar_Var

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Re: The Fire Within
« Reply #1 on: March 12, 2021, 06:08:37 PM »
Kindly review the poetry and say your thoughts. Thanks
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Re: The Fire Within
« Reply #2 on: March 12, 2021, 06:41:40 PM »
One only has to post one post...Yours shows as you posting same poem twice.

"Sudarshan" isn't there a chemical plant that goes by that name?



I was born and raised wearing hand me down shoes and clothes-but I was richer by far than those who thought themselves 'my betters.'  I'd take love over riches and fame any day.

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Re: The Fire Within
« Reply #3 on: March 12, 2021, 06:48:45 PM »
Haha. That's just a common name in India.

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Re: The Fire Within
« Reply #4 on: March 12, 2021, 06:50:12 PM »
Haha. That's just a common name in India.

I  learn something new every day. ;)
I was born and raised wearing hand me down shoes and clothes-but I was richer by far than those who thought themselves 'my betters.'  I'd take love over riches and fame any day.

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Re: The Fire Within
« Reply #5 on: March 12, 2021, 06:55:04 PM »
Oh! The fierce fire’s flames flew freely,

fluently flowing and fluttering with finesse,

while flickering its fickle flame frequently,

as its flare flips and forms a fortress,

and forces out the freezing fear finely.

 

Oh! The bursting blaze burns brightly,

Bringing belief and bestowing bravery,

And building the broken bricks and bailey,

Boasting, buried beneath, the brimming beauty,


-Sudarshan

The poem speaks of relief from a  burden.  I like the flow of the words.
I was born and raised wearing hand me down shoes and clothes-but I was richer by far than those who thought themselves 'my betters.'  I'd take love over riches and fame any day.