Author Topic: Missing Autumn  (Read 101 times)

Offline leenadia

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Missing Autumn
« on: January 23, 2021, 03:48:13 PM »
[Hi there! I'm not a native English speaker and this is my first post here, so please excuse oddities regarding language, if included, and inform me about them! Anyway, I hope you'll enjoy my poem.]


Is it January? Then I should be
expecting spring, not missing autumn,
I guess. There are memories caressing my
messed-up mind, still, they cruelly haul it back from beloved
states of unconsciousness. I had been tranquil, so tranquil

before I began passing my days breathing
against chilly window-panes, missing autumn.
The snow lies iridescent, almost pretty, but I
do not want my world to glimmer, I want
it to burn and make me unlearn

restriction on carpets woven with golden leaves.
I am scraping paint off ancient furniture, missing autumn.
Recollections rattle reverberantly. I remember imbibing
moonlight, blissfully. I remember a dance beneath
capricious November rain. I remember how that beauteous smile

blossomed on your lips, too tender to survive winter.
Perhaps, it is not autumn I miss.

Offline JTetstone

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Re: Missing Autumn
« Reply #1 on: January 23, 2021, 04:11:57 PM »
Beautiful! Thank you for sharing. 
At first glance I thought, " the first word of each sentence should have begin with a capital letter."
After doing some research, I learned, 'not always'. 

Welcome, to MWC.

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Offline crch

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Re: Missing Autumn
« Reply #2 on: February 17, 2021, 04:57:18 PM »
"Recollections rattle reverberantly. I remember imbibing
moonlight, blissfully. I remember a dance beneath
capricious November rain. I remember how that beauteous smile

blossomed on your lips, too tender to survive winter.
Perhaps, it is not autumn I miss."

This is my favorite part and I love the word "beauteous"!

Offline Royal Thorn 78

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Re: Missing Autumn
« Reply #3 on: February 19, 2021, 12:23:18 PM »
English being your second language presents its own set of hurdles in writing poetry, but this effort demonstrates that you are up to the challenges.  Question -- do you write in your first language and then translate?