Hi there!
I would like to start off by saying how enjoyable it was to read, it helped me I think, even though the first example was directed at mothers, and I am neither woman nor father.
First Sample:
The heading is indeed "Captivating" to say the least, I think your target audience will differently be drawn to it.
The flow is amazing, for both samples. I have Dyslexia, and even though I will always have difficulty reading; the flow in your writing was easy to understand, so I can only imagine how easy it would be if I didn't have such a disability that affects my reading and more.
Early in I am confronted with the thought of how men and women have different societal roles, the roles priorities women to nurture their child more so than to provide for and to be successful in work (whether it be to provide for a family or for self).
I think man's societal role to provide for his family allows him an advantage when it comes to this, definitely more so than women; though women aren't alone in this difficult choice, they definitely worst off; due to society's view on their choice. Men are still affected by this though differently and perhaps less so; thus is life. like how single dads or stay home dads probably feel anxious about not providing financially when nurturing his child and vise versa when providing he is unable to nurture his child.
The Slight and only grammar mistake I spotted was this "But, I also felt strongly that I was entrusted this child for a reason."
I think you missed the "to" in the writing for example "But, I also felt strongly that I was entrusted to this child for a reason." I think this reads better, please tell me if I am wrong.
Even though, as I said I'm neither father nor a woman I felt inspired, some of this can be transferred into other aspects of life.
I could also feel the emotion in what was being written as if you were with me in the room; speaking to me about your trials and tribulations.
Second Sample:
Yes, again the heading is "Captivating" it drew me into reading it
First of all, I would like to say, your kid sounds very smart and very kind, your lucky to have each other.
For some reason, I made fewer notes for this than the first sample, not sure why? perhaps I since I believe I am being myself already? maybe... hopefully, otherwise I am oblivious of what self I'm being nowadays.
I will be linking sample 2 to my partner, as they are struggling with anxiety right now, and apart of that is that difficultly about "self", I hope this can help them, so thank you very much for posting here, and writing such inspiring and insightful things.
That is all, I hope my comment is helpful and that you continue writing your thoughts, as I found them insightful.
