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Offline Brad2901

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Review my poem please
« on: June 04, 2021, 03:12:14 PM »
Hi everyone I would love some complete honest opinions on my poem pretty please
thank you :-*

Offline jt72

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Re: Review my poem please
« Reply #1 on: June 04, 2021, 05:24:15 PM »
Third stanza lines 1 and three.

But I'd rather die [than] admit I care
Risk my pride to be left in despair
I want you ,crave you,[need you]

Hope this helps.
Interesting the way the internet really works.   jt jt