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Offline ssilvs

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hello! have an unedited poem that i can’t recall writing
« on: July 17, 2020, 07:18:52 PM »
i have known
emptiness and little else: the empty
palm, the empty
  heart, the empty
     hearth. i have known some
                                                    bird
     not yet ready to force its way from its
shell, laying in the dirt featherless and
                                                              feckless. i have been that little
bird, shivering in the
dirt, no nest to
                            speak
                                        of. i cannot say if i have a
name or a
                 point or anything at
all, i have known nothing and
                             nothing and
                                                                      nobody. i have not yet known /
myself, or the fires i
must have come from or the soft,
sweet taste that comes with knowing
you are
alive, certainly i am alive
certainly i am
certainly i am not
nothing or
nobody or
empty but still i lay in the grass,
premature or pathetic. still i lay in the
dirt with ants crawling on my
body with no
body at all i have no physical form i want no physical
form i want to exist as nothing at all and finally my hands will be wings and my skin will be feathered like i am
sitting on a boat in the ocean, waves rocking and
rocking.
“Nothing more invites a reader than an argument unlooked for” - Robert Burton

“we love art as ruins, a collaboration between the artist and entropy” - jaako pallasvulo
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Re: hello! have an unedited poem that i can’t recall writing
« Reply #1 on: July 19, 2020, 10:42:44 AM »
I really like the way the spacing if the lines changes the rhythm of the poem in a non traditional way.
:) Mabel

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Re: hello! have an unedited poem that i can’t recall writing
« Reply #2 on: July 22, 2020, 11:25:00 PM »
I really like the way the spacing if the lines changes the rhythm of the poem in a non traditional way.

thank you, i think
“Nothing more invites a reader than an argument unlooked for” - Robert Burton

“we love art as ruins, a collaboration between the artist and entropy” - jaako pallasvulo
(crossposting is a lil too much work–you can find me here as well https://hellopoetry.com/ssilvs/ )