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Offline Mark T

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A few quads
« on: February 25, 2021, 04:10:47 PM »

Yesterday

We met for coffee one morning,
as some old lovers do. How are you –
The moment seemed strange, for 
the shape of her lips had changed.


Radical

Like neurons from a gun
What have we become –
Slaves to microwaves
Lives as liquid assets


Rebellion

Yahweh is dead, I think.
This is good, most likely.
But what happens when
half a bipolarity remains?


Descent

Speckles of rain…
drifting moon-clouds.
The dark earth swallows
and these stars are serene.


Cursive

So Grandma finally buckled
and bought a smart phone.
Grandpa, meanwhile,
has nothing to do.


Around

You say you love me
but I do not understand
the nature of this promise,
only the arrows of domesticity.



« Last Edit: February 25, 2021, 04:12:36 PM by Mark T »

Offline Royal Thorn 78

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Re: A few quads
« Reply #1 on: February 25, 2021, 06:33:39 PM »
You capture the spirit of quads in these wonderful exercises/poems.  I recognize the trademark see-saw line endings, growing more pronounced as the session goes on.

I think 1, 3, and 5 are the strongest.   All have a deft touch with the pen. 

Cheers.

R

Offline crch

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Re: A few quads
« Reply #2 on: March 01, 2021, 06:25:18 PM »
My interpretation of your poem is that each stanza builds upon the other depicting the life flow of a couple.
I like that #1 and #5 present, then answer - a full circle.

I didn't quite get "Cursive".  I wanted to "Descend" into the conclusion, "Around".

Yesterday
Radical
Rebellion
Decent
(Cursive)
Around

I enjoyed reading your poem.