Author Topic: In Daylight  (Read 778 times)

Offline indar

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In Daylight
« on: May 29, 2020, 05:37:18 PM »
The dying body beneath him
gushed feces and urine.
He leaned forward, harder,
fingered himself from his pocket
in secret joy.

Offline ssilvs

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Re: In Daylight
« Reply #1 on: July 22, 2020, 11:31:11 PM »
well, this is certainly something. gotta say, nothing about this guy’s “joy” sounds secret  ;D
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Offline Nora

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Re: In Daylight
« Reply #2 on: September 06, 2020, 01:28:43 PM »
I have to say, I feel a little dirty now having read that

Offline Sheena

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Re: In Daylight
« Reply #3 on: November 06, 2020, 06:54:39 AM »
I am confused. Not sure if I am less intellectual to understand the poem or it is so simple and I am trying to read between the lines.

Offline Nora

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Re: In Daylight
« Reply #4 on: November 06, 2020, 11:11:25 AM »
The dying body beneath him
gushed feces and urine.
He leaned forward, harder,
fingered himself from his pocket
in secret joy.

I'm not about to comment on your intellectual ability; the following is just how I see "In Daylight". So it appears to be either a little story about someone who fatally attacked another human being, who is masturbating over that person in their death throes; or about someone who comes across that other human being in the process of dying who proceeds in the same way. I definitely need a shower again.

Offline drab

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Re: In Daylight
« Reply #5 on: November 07, 2020, 08:54:51 PM »
It's about the black man who was suffocated by a police man in America a few months ago; it describes the event...no shower required!
To live, with gentle but cunning deceit, and accept the consequences, is the destiny of every man.

Offline Nora

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Re: In Daylight
« Reply #6 on: November 08, 2020, 04:04:55 PM »
OK, that context puts a whole new light on it.