Author Topic: Billionaire Cop  (Read 529 times)

Offline Angelk

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Billionaire Cop
« on: May 22, 2020, 08:50:43 AM »

This is my story plot so please let me know hows it?

Zoe is an Elementary school teacher in Glasgow. She loves her brother and she was very close to him but after that, he came into contact with some bad boys group, and after that, he made some bad decisions. Her brother didn't have money for food so he theft some money and food from a small store and the police caught him and locked in jail. The next day she was working in school and she got a call from the police station That her brother locked in jail. She runs there to free her brother but then she met a handsome cop(Ram Smith) and she asked him, How will she get bail for her brother? But with bad news, she left the police station.

Cop-Ray Smith is a cop in Glasgow city for the last five years. He loves his family and he is very close to his grandfather. He got a call from his brother that his grandfather has died. He reached there in 20 minutes. The next day his family got a call from his family lawyer and they reached there and got the news that his grandfather was a billionaire and everyone was shocked and also everyone going to become also a billionaire. After that news, he was very confused. When he reached the police station, he met a pretty girl, and with bad news she left the police station. When she left he was thinking about that pretty girl and made some inquiry about her. After that, he contacted her and become very close friends. They had feelings for each other. One day they slept together and Ray got a call from his boss that there were some shots near the lake and they need help. When he reached there and got the detail that Zoe's brother shoots that shots. He locked him in jail the second time. When Zoe found out that details about his brother and Ray then she breakout with Ray.

Finally when she got the details of why Ray locked his brother and her brother needed help and How he helped him then she apologized to him for her mistakes and The came back together and Ray proposed her and married her.

« Last Edit: May 22, 2020, 09:37:21 AM by Angelk »

Offline PIJ1951

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Re: Billionaire Cop
« Reply #1 on: May 23, 2020, 05:58:05 AM »
I'm sorry but it doesn't look great. For one thing, your written English is not up to scratch (based on this post - it's poor). Also, the story as it's laid out here is completely unbelievable. The sequence of events makes little sense in the real world. My advice - read, read and read some more before even contemplating any attempt to write a story yourself.

Offline pclark333

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Re: Billionaire Cop
« Reply #2 on: May 24, 2020, 09:02:58 AM »
Echoing that prior guy's comments, please take some time to read and read and read.  It will change the way you think and write.  Read Lost Horizon, Life of Pi, and Of Mice and Men.  Read Memory Man, The Hunt for Red October, and The World According to Garp.  Read anything by Charles Dickens then try to tell a story like him.  If you want to be a writer, all this will be fun!

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Re: Billionaire Cop
« Reply #3 on: May 24, 2020, 10:43:52 AM »
In order to write a story plot one must fully understand what a story plot is.  There are many articles on the internet that give examples of story plots. Best of luck in your writing.   jt

story plot

Plot is a literary term used to describe the events that make up a story, or the main part of a story. These events relate to each other in a pattern or a sequence. The structure of a novel depends on the organization of events in the plot of the story.
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I was born and raised wearing hand me down shoes and clothes-but I was richer by far than those who thought themselves 'my betters.'  I'd take love over riches and fame any day.

Offline jessywrites

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Re: Billionaire Cop
« Reply #4 on: June 13, 2020, 07:27:27 AM »
I suggest joining a local writer's circle, they are probably slowly shifting from zoom to IRL again. Look for one on MeetUp (an app). You need exercise, it's almost like playing a sport, you can't join the Bundesliga or Champion's League without practice.