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Offline smann36

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Beginning of a pilot
« on: February 05, 2020, 09:16:15 AM »
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Re: Beginning of a pilot
« Reply #1 on: February 05, 2020, 04:06:15 PM »
INT . PUB - NIGHT

A DRUNK MAN sits at the bar with an empty seat beside him.

He's VERY drunk, attempting to order another shot of whiskey.

In the background sits a MAN - noticing the mess.

A phone vibrates and lights up on the bar. The man shoots back his whiskey and picks up the phone. Squinting his eyes to focus on the text.

It's a picture... It's blurry... It's a dick pic!?

A WOMAN reaches in and grabs the phone from his hand. He turns around and knocks her to the floor - the phone goes flying out of her hand.

The DRUNK MAN gets punched in the face and falls flat on the ground.

We reveal the MAN sitting at the table earlier.

MAN
(Extending his hand to the woman on the ground)

You alright?

WOMAN

I didn't need you to do that.

MAN

Not exactly why I did it

She gets up without accepting his hand for help.

In the background a few security guards escort the DRUNK MAN out of the bar.

WOMAN

That man just broke my fucking face, you know, not the right time to be trying to pick me up.

MAN

No... I was just trying to pick you up

WOMAN

I JUST said, NOT the right time to pick me up.


She dusts off her dress and heads towards an empty table with a half empty beer unattended.

She grabs the beer and chugs whatever's left.

The man watches and is amazed. He quietly signals the bar for two more.


WOMAN

Was this mine?

MAN

No...

WOMAN

Fuck



The waitress comes by and hands the MAN the two beers.

He hands the WOMAN her beer.



MAN

Here - a fresh one.



They clink bottles and take a sip



WOMAN

Thank you, for this. (Nods her head toward the stool on the ground from the fall earlier) and that.



She takes another huge gulp of her beer - the man signals for two more without her attention.



WOMAN (cont.)

This isn't a normal thing for me, you know. I'm not in bar's every week getting smacked in the face just waiting for some handsome dude to come along and save me. I don't NEED saving - I'm the saver. I can take care of myself, AND you. Not you - you. The metaphorical you. The you which is-

MAN

Like a life saver. (extremely proud of himself)

WOMAN

What?

MAN

Life saver - you said you don't need saving, you're the saver.

WOMAN

Oh, and not cause I'm sweet?

MAN

I was JUST about to get to that!


The waitress comes by and places another beer on the table


WOMAN

Tryna get me drunk?



The WOMAN takes a swig of her drink - spilling a little, letting it drip down her chin.


WOMAN (cont.)

er!

MAN

You're gonna need it if you wanna forget about the pain

WOMAN
(Sarcastically)

Which pain?


She points to her face... Her heart... Her vagina..

The man chuckles and a light bulb turns on above his head.


MAN

Come with me.






EXT. Park. Night.

The MAN and WOMAN walk through a dimly lit park.

The MAN is scanning the ground looking for something.

WOMAN

Should I be concerned? I thought we'd be in your car half way through our third time by now. WHAT are we looking for can you please just tell me!

MAN
(disgusted)

I'm not gonna fuck you in my car

WOMAN
(disappointed)

uh-

MAN

We'll just go to my place for that - I live 5 minutes away.

WOMAN
(excited)

aah-

The MAN and WOMAN share a look.

They slowly move closer.

Their lips are just about to touch as...

The MANS eyes widen- he turns his head and walks off screen.

We watch as the woman stands there - confused and let down.

The MAN comes running back towards her.

Man

Let's go!

END.