Author Topic: listen for her  (Read 364 times)

Offline ChabnerKerp

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listen for her
« on: February 03, 2020, 06:49:43 PM »
the,     

###

     Ilaya puked in the garbage and screamed at the top of her lungs. She didnít know Chinese
anymore, but that didnít stop her from knowing Chinese anymore. She didnít know Chinese
anymore. And then she spoke in English.
     ďHello, I am not here.Ē
     And then she screamed.
     And then she screamed
     And eht  a tkf a;e
this is not a,     ;
~T.C.

Offline PIJ1951

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Re: listen for her
« Reply #1 on: February 04, 2020, 06:46:15 AM »
It looks like you pressed 'post' before previewing what you entered in the text box because this fragment doesn't make a lot of sense on its own.
I'm not sure how she screamed 'at the top of her lungs' (?) whether she was vomiting at the same time or not - and the bit about not knowing Chinese but still knowing it. . . it's a muddle.

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Re: listen for her
« Reply #2 on: February 27, 2020, 10:18:15 AM »
Yeah, it is a muddle. I like your interpretation.

If I may explain a little, everything in this post was intentional. Starting with "the,". Any time I've had a mental block and wanted to force out a thought, all that comes out is "the,". Next line, "###" is indicative of my frame of mind when going into the next flow of thought in place of the word "gun", which is hinted at by the shape of the prose. This also is supposed to set the tone of the piece as kind of political commentary as well as a personal piece.

I'm glad all of the meaning isn't outwardly available.
~T.C.

Offline PIJ1951

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Re: listen for her
« Reply #3 on: February 27, 2020, 10:47:06 AM »
Political commentary? Lol

I guess you wrote this without a thought for the reader.