I am writing my first poem, its my anniversary coming up and I want to get this perfect, any and all feed back is appreciated

We meet like lines, perpendicularly
Creating a perfect corner, creating satisfaction
Invader of your dreams – adversity
Rewarding deep slumbers, it takes them
Your heart, as warm as a blacksmiths iron
Constantly hit and shaped, forced to remould
Despite the constant attacks, you're defiant
Unable to be controlled
Your world is a place of ever-changing landscapes
The sky and mountains never the same
Worlds composition, changing at labyrinths pace
Your feet fixed firmly in position, their aim?
Only you know my dear,
Only you can determine the outcome,
Here's to 1 year
Loving you, it's a rule of thumb.