Author Topic: The World I Live In  (Read 1896 times)

Offline AntonioM

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The World I Live In
« on: July 31, 2019, 03:04:08 PM »

Night of Broken Glass, Trail of Tears and so much more,

Centuries of hate and violence and decades of global war,

Broken hearts, shattered dreams the past is dull and bleak,

But hope for tomorrow’s youth is hope that we should seek,

Assassination, Procrastination when are we going to learn,

Looking back on that Tuesday, when Towers they did burn,

With no remorse only joy, pride to say the least,

And we’re steadily looking for “666” the supposed mark of the beast,

When are we going to see, the beast is already here,

He’s manipulating, contemplating using hate and fear,

Wake up, open your eyes and see the world is not so bright,

Because everyday we’re lead to kill and everyday we’re force to fight,

Revolutions and Evolutions we’ve seen our share through time,

And still we can’t prevent our kids from committing heinous crimes?

Crimes against humanity and crimes against my dignity,

Turn back the hands of time and witness hate, infinitely.

I know there’s hope for this world, but we have to search so deep,

And right when we find it the world will take a leap,

A leap into the right direction, a leap towards our resurrection,

Tell me can’t you feel it in the deepness of our humane connection?

I strive for world compassion my passion is just that,

And a decade of peace is broken at the dropping of a hat?

“I remember when times were simpler.” They were never simple you hear?

You were just in the dark and blinded by your fear,

Kennedy and King standing tall side by side,

Standing for equal rights or until the bullets went inside.

Filling the air with controversy and talk about conspiracy,

But what about reading and writing, you know, “Fundaments” like literacy?

Distractions, reactions the media’s in your head,

Trying to make you forget about that war, and forget about the dead,

Can’t I get it to you, you’re being played for a fool,

Forget about what you’ve heard the world I live in is cruel.

Now  I want you to understand that all the world is underhanded,

And just to be candid, this is something that man did,

And could easily undo, but the will to change must come from in you,

You watch the news and get the blues because the world is just so sad,

And you search for excuses when we all should be feeling bad,

Tell me what did you do today to make this world a little better?

Well, you’d better start doing something ‘fore we get that awful letter,

Saying “sorry, you didn’t get in” to Heaven is what I mean.

Hell will be quite the battle, remember El Alamein ?

Well of course not, no one does, you weren’t there, why care?

Because if we hadn’t one that time, Hitler would be reigning chair.

But the facts are that was just simply that,

But did you know twelve million died, without raising fist or bat?

The question I’m posing is, “Is ignorance your choice?”

Because together we can change the world by speaking as one voice,

Speaking against intolerance and cruelty loud and clear,

Speaking so that all six billion of us can finally truly hear,

Hear the truth about the world in which we all must try to live,

And finally learn that to truly love is to truly give,

Give your hearts, your souls, and all the strengths between,

The world is our blank canvass, let’s paint a peaceful scene.

Scene one, cut two, the entire globe is looking at you,

 Watching you to make a difference, looking at you to change our appearance,

Disappearance, reappearance the world has got to change. . . its pace.

World domination?! Stop looking for that master race,

Discrimination, anticipation, the world is waiting to see,

What is it you’re going to do, or not, another catastrophe?

Make a difference, change the world, because my perspective is just this,

Just tell me that I’ve got it wrong, I’ve got it all amiss,

World complications, Im-penetrations,
the front lines start at home,

And each time you step out your door,
you’re stepping out alone.

So take my hand and come with me, and let me be the first to say,

We all must clear a path for a new and brighter day.

Imagination, we’re God’s creation, If we all would just do what it is we do, but it has got to start somewhere, so let’s let it start
with YOU

Offline poetryman123

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Re: The World I Live In
« Reply #1 on: August 05, 2019, 12:54:28 PM »
Interesting but I have nothing to say about it, it was too long.

Offline dlp

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Re: The World I Live In
« Reply #2 on: August 07, 2019, 05:06:02 AM »
this sounds like something you would hear on Sunday morning. I think preaching is best left to the pulpit

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Re: The World I Live In
« Reply #3 on: August 15, 2019, 04:43:32 PM »
Hey, AntonioM

Your poem has lots of passion in it and some nice rhythms and rhymes in parts.  It felt more like a hip-hop song to me.  But it did have some great messages.  I would try to distill the poem down to just a few of the observations you wish to share.  Probably less is more here.  Keep writing though because poetry comes from the heart.  You just need to distill it down, ok.  (Disclaimer:  I'm a newbie, but love it when people share their intimate stuff ....) 

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Re: The World I Live In
« Reply #4 on: September 15, 2019, 01:53:27 AM »
Good ideas. Wish it was as simple as you poem seems to want to convey. As if we could all just start waking up and everyone would solve the worlds problems. I don't think the world really works like that. But it's a nice thought and nice poem.

Offline Tom 10

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Re: The World I Live In
« Reply #5 on: November 01, 2019, 05:01:01 PM »
Well hello, ARM!

What a delight to see your work again.  As usual, you seem to be pushing personal boundaries.   :)   I am most surprised with your rhymes and near rhymes, as well as the hopeful conclusion.

I think this poem is meant to be read aloud.  When I read this aloud it seems to leap off the page.  I would love to hear it read in your voice.   When rhymes are painted with such a lavish brush, the cadence becomes essential, and I don't think I can get that right just from reading this on the screen.