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Offline Hunter

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My first page of my new script
« on: June 06, 2019, 12:39:33 AM »

TURNER, 40s, with his suit tied to his waist, enters the bridge.

An inhuman voice, KIRA, speaks.

                                             KIRA (O.S.)
                       Twenty-eight days.

A younger man, STEVE, sits at a monitor. He swivels around to Turner, points at the window.
                       Hey, Cap’, you need to see this.

Turner sets his gaze to the window - a dark hole in their path.

                      What the hell is that?

JOHN, 30s, turns his attention to it.

                      It sure as shit isn‘t a black hole.

                     We wouldn’t be having this conversation
                     if it were.

STACEY, next to John, speaks.

Turner turns to the pilot, NATHAN.
                    Why are we moving closer to it?

Nathan looks as if he’s seen a ghost.

                    It‘s not me. It’s pulling u — —

— — The spaceship RATTLES and suddenly gets sucked into it.

                                                                  FADE TO BLACK.