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certainly doctor haven
« on: February 11, 2019, 12:14:30 AM »
The computer slid into the darkness of my electric neglect.
Crying for pain in the snow-ropes of random.
Easily aching, the wax of rendered delusions
scrapes the blue wall of defeat.

Will the rug weave the willful drops of the marmalade captain?
Will the night dog bite the wrapper?

Heavenly hues of salamanders pretend to suck the jacket of Ohio.

Warping, wrenching, churning;
for the fruits of the tomato-whale linger purposefully past
the tree green penis of time.

Parting, parting.

The candy cane wires of memories leave them
for the froth of integrity.

Never again shall I wade past the silver needle.
Past  its  wretched peace.

Passed the purple.

Passed the green.

Past the charcoal clouds, mourning the death of the sun garden.

When the will-bird colors its  eye
greener then the glass of tomorrow,
Then the water will free the frog of peace.
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Re: certainly doctor havsn
« Reply #1 on: February 11, 2019, 12:47:19 PM »
When the will-bird colors its  eye
greener then the glass of tomorrow,
Then the water will free the frog of peace.

My favorite part of your poem.  Very good write, dlp.

Jan

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Re: certainly doctor havsn
« Reply #2 on: February 11, 2019, 04:43:34 PM »
thank you jan for only reading but commenting on my poem.  i am happy you enjoyed it. my favorite line is (even though they are all my favorite--this one is my favorist-is that a word?  well it is now)
"Past the charcoal clouds, mourning the death of the sun garden".
 

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« Reply #3 on: February 11, 2019, 05:16:11 PM »
thank you jan for only reading but commenting on my poem.  i am happy you enjoyed it. my favorite line is (even though they are all my favorite--this one is my favorist-is that a word?  well it is now)
"Past the charcoal clouds, mourning the death of the sun garden".

You welcome..... 

Meaning of Favoristic: Characterized by favoritism
 https://lotsofwords.com/definition/favoristic

 favorist would mean a favorite from a  favorite group.....one would think.

It looks like you've created a new word.  ;)

Thank you for sharing your work, dlp.

Jan