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Offline AntonioM

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Blood From the Almond Tree
« on: January 30, 2019, 05:40:21 PM »
Our gnarled tree slants
one-sided, traumatized by
the axes of life. They bare roots
and break boughs not rotted
by fungal infections.
We family tree like Charlie Brown,
just use the new growth,
Suffer not little children.

Bloody knuckles bent in high style
spelling out the obvious gang choice
For a Midwestern transplant in southern
California-- thick with my aunt's matters,
face smashed to pieces like some nut,
fallen from a great height.
Only night hides the red and purple shadows
of despair--
Save the rest for another time.
ARM

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Re: Blood From the Almond Tree
« Reply #1 on: January 31, 2019, 06:19:23 PM »
Many of the poems, I read here [at MWC] are
to far over my head- for me to understand.
But, after a few comments, by others, I
always have a better understanding of what
the poem is about.


We family tree like Charlie Brown,
just use the new growth,
Suffer not little children.


Isn't  a family tree's "new growth" its children?

Jan
« Last Edit: January 31, 2019, 06:21:23 PM by heartsongjt »
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Re: Blood From the Almond Tree
« Reply #2 on: February 01, 2019, 02:05:34 AM »
That's right. Later, the poem describes domestic violence that causes the ruined trunk, the less desirable portions of it, to remain hidden or discarded.

Thanks for reading.

Antonio
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Re: Blood From the Almond Tree
« Reply #3 on: February 01, 2019, 10:30:17 AM »
I assume the aunt has been beaten in the face. And perhaps this incident is a part of a family dynamic. One thing jars me in reading this: the mention of the Charlie Brown (tree) which was a running joke re his scrawny Christmas tree. It is incongruous in this context and takes away from the seriousness of the theme.

The analogy of the damaged tree for family violence is very good and the face smashed like a nut is horrifying. Stick with those elements and the poem will be much more effective.

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Re: Blood From the Almond Tree
« Reply #4 on: February 01, 2019, 06:20:14 PM »
That's right. Later, the poem describes domestic violence that causes the ruined trunk, the less desirable portions of it, to remain hidden or discarded.

Thanks for reading.

Antonio

You welcome. When  I read  the poem now, it has more meaning.

"ruined trunk"  seems so permanent.  It's a good write.     
Jan
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Re: Blood From the Almond Tree
« Reply #5 on: February 06, 2019, 01:12:34 PM »
On the line axes of life I would consider taking out of life.  It may dilute the power of the poem.  Your worss alone convey the aces of life without you saying it

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Re: Blood From the Almond Tree
« Reply #6 on: February 06, 2019, 04:07:13 PM »
So many meanings here. Oh my. By the way I think the poem is really creative.
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Re: Blood From the Almond Tree
« Reply #7 on: February 07, 2019, 04:20:42 PM »
Only night hides the red and purple shadows
of despair--

Great line, good piece. Nice work, ARM.