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Poems from Heartsong Poetry Diary
« on: October 15, 2018, 09:04:40 PM »
I Am Just Passing Through
 
A minute in the quite of night finds me
 With a memory of you clutched tightly to my heart;
 And for that short sweet essence of time
 the world stands still for my tears to fall
 on the memories in my mind.
 As I morn for times past and things
 gone, never to return to me in this life time.
 I remember how life was without feeling
 such a void in my life . . .
 I remember in that one minute a million moments
 filled with laughter, tears
 hard times, and happy years;
 I remember the time
 When even the tears were a blessing
 because I shared them with you . . .
 And when another night comes I will again
 turn to all the good memories
 to find the strength, understanding, and courage
 To live in a world, I am just passing through.
[August 14, 2003- 11:26pm]
 

For The Wake of the Day is in my Soul

 When nighttime comes I cannot sleep
 I can only close my eyes
 And ask the Lord my soul to keep
 ~For the wake of the day is in my soul.

 When nighttime comes I look into the
 darkness and see all things my life has been
 All the roads that led to nowhere
 When in time of weakness I blamed
 others for my mistakes because not one
 reached out a kind hand
 ~in my times of total despair;

 And then there are the roads I followed
 like a blind man in search of light,
 that took me to the people in places
 Who would after taking me into their hearts
 Send me off again ~ with the memory of their
 kind deeds
 ~and the looks of kindness on their faces....
 Who I blame for any kindness that I myself
 might let loose in the world;
 For the wake of the day is in my soul,
 Though nighttime touches my flesh
 I like the blind man stumbling down a dark road
 see and understand that there are far worse
 things in store for those who have sight
 ~but cannot see.
 When nighttime comes I cannot sleep
 I can only close my eyes
 And ask the Lord my soul to keep
 ~For the wake of the day is in my soul.
[written August 17, 2003]
                     -Jan Tetstone


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Re: Poems from Heartsong Poetry Diary
« Reply #1 on: October 18, 2018, 04:19:06 AM »
Really enjoyed these two poems, Jan.
I'm not skilled in ready poetry, but I enjoyed these two.
The first one a touching poem, about transitoriness of love, time, and life. I noticed whilst reading there were two typos, "quite of night", and "As I morn for times past".
But then,(I hope) I saw how clever it was. To use quite as in "absolute", the absolute of night, and morn, as in dawn, conveying a mental movement back in time. Whilst it also works in the other sense. That's some skillful polyvalency.

I really enjoy the contrasts in the second poem, between light/dark, blindness/sight, contracted with the inward dark and light of despondency and kindness. I was a bit lost here, and couldn't figure out the meaning of it:
"~and the looks of kindness on their faces... Who I blame for any kindness that I myself
 might let loose in the world;"

Perhaps, you'd be kind enough to let me know sometime.
Thanks for sharing.

 
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« Reply #2 on: October 18, 2018, 09:12:44 AM »
Really enjoyed these two poems, Jan.
I'm not skilled in ready poetry, but I enjoyed these two.
The first one a touching poem, about transitoriness of love, time, and life. I noticed whilst reading there were two typos, "quite of night", and "As I morn for times past".
But then,(I hope) I saw how clever it was. To use quite as in "absolute", the absolute of night, and morn, as in dawn, conveying a mental movement back in time. Whilst it also works in the other sense. That's some skillful polyvalency.

I really enjoy the contrasts in the second poem, between light/dark, blindness/sight, contracted with the inward dark and light of despondency and kindness. I was a bit lost here, and couldn't figure out the meaning of it:
"~and the looks of kindness on their faces... Who I blame for any kindness that I myself
 might let loose in the world;"

Perhaps, you'd be kind enough to let me know sometime.
Thanks for sharing.

Thank you EM. It was a nice surprise to see/read your comment.

"~and the looks of kindness on their faces... Who I blame for any kindness that I myself
 might let loose in the world;"

Sometimes in looking back over my life, I remember the kind deeds,  more clearly than the faces of the deed doers. My life would be a flip side of what it is today, had it not been for the caring souls who ,unknowingly, left their mark on my mind and in my heart. Because of the kindness shown to me many years ago, I strive always to be worthy of the caring others showed for me (and my life)...when I stood at the cross roads of my life.

Being a heart writer, I make lots  of writing mistakes, according to poets who go/have gone to school to learn the art of painting pictures with words. But, because my writing has always been for the purpose of unloading my mind, in order to get a better understanding of my emotions, and experiences, I write down my thoughts as they leave my heart and mind.

The product of my writing ( my thoughts and feeling, about myself, others, my life, and life its self) are not restrained by rules on how poetry should/should not be composed.

I hope I have answered your question.

jt

 

 

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« Reply #3 on: October 18, 2018, 05:24:12 PM »
Thanks, Jan.

Sorry for the misunderstanding.
I understand what were saying now.
Yes, it's better not to restrained by rules, and structure when it comes to something so personal and expressive.
But, still, they read like skilled work of a master craftsman.
Your poems, they're so wholesome, and have their own completeness.

Thanks again
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« Reply #4 on: October 18, 2018, 05:54:24 PM »
Thanks, Jan.

Sorry for the misunderstanding.
I understand what were saying now.
Yes, it's better not to restrained by rules, and structure when it comes to something so personal and expressive.
But, still, they read like skilled work of a master craftsman.
Your poems, they're so wholesome, and have their own completeness.

Thanks again


I hope this link works for you. The waybackmachine site started  achieving  my personal poetry site The Spirit Within Poetry  in 2012.
http://web.archive.org/web/20120620194455/http://thespiritwithinpoetry.com:80/


I have never sold a poem.
Through my poetry I give pieces of my heart back into the world.

Thank you for your comments on my poetry.                               jt