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Offline indar

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Re: Sometimes in poetry
« Reply #30 on: May 07, 2019, 07:14:06 PM »
Of course it was---I don't know what I was thinking :o :o :o

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Re: Sometimes in poetry
« Reply #31 on: May 07, 2019, 07:29:15 PM »
Nice imagery and rhythm; words roll off the tongue.

Thanks for comments, Inky and dip. dip, you have it close enough. Poems about poetry are never a good idea but I tried. Think of each stanza as crumpled ball of paper in a corner as the poet tries different things in search of a truth to be found. So they are all separate poem attempts which could be the unifying aspect but that's too abstract to pick up from the writing, I guess. My nod to form is tailoring line lengths to create shapes, which influences word choices and thus the meaning, if any, to be found in the piece. It becomes what it is.   

Perhaps instead of "No....," you can use actions: crumple, delete, burn, etc.?

I agree with dip RE: stanza subjects, but they can be entirely new poems too... 

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Re: Sometimes in poetry
« Reply #32 on: May 08, 2019, 06:25:10 PM »


                                        Sliver


I am tired. My isolation of god-kill
has exhausted me. I have abandoned
my memories on outcrops of nostalgia,
and tattooed my cliff-tops of desolation
with liarís glyphs and cynical graffiti.

I have swallowed stones, twisted
on foreign altars inimical with regret,
and wept acidly in sight of the sun,
having fled before a cyanide moon
hidden in indigo rain in the dawn.

I seek no redemption for patterns
impaled on slivers of circumstance,
nor any random unfolding of truth
by earthly egos and written faiths,
only freedom and the fall of days.




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Re: Sometimes in poetry
« Reply #33 on: May 08, 2019, 09:16:20 PM »

                                        Sliver


I am tired. My isolation of god-kill
has exhausted me. I have abandoned
my memories on outcrops of nostalgia,
and tattooed my cliff-tops of desolation
with liar’s glyphs and cynical graffiti.

I have swallowed stones, twisted
on foreign altars inimical with regret,
and wept acidly in sight of the sun,
having fled before a cyanide moon
hidden in indigo rain in the dawn.

I seek no redemption for patterns
impaled on slivers of circumstance,
nor any random unfolding of truth
by earthly egos and written faiths,
only freedom and the fall of days.


I seek no redemption for patterns
impaled on slivers of circumstance,
nor any random unfolding of truth
by earthly egos and written faiths,
only freedom and the fall of days.

MarkT this is my favorite of all the poems you've posted on MWC.




Offline Mark T

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Re: Sometimes in poetry
« Reply #34 on: May 12, 2019, 04:39:01 PM »

Apologies for tardiness of reply, things have been a little hectic.

Linda, thank you for the encouragement, very kind things you say.

poet-e, a revision was posted on page 2. Thanks for your comment.

Jan, glad you liked the piece. Would you humor me in future by not quoting my full poem before replying? Thanks, Mark.   

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Re: Sometimes in poetry
« Reply #35 on: May 12, 2019, 05:20:44 PM »
Jan, glad you liked the piece. Would you humor me in future by not quoting my full poem before replying? Thanks, Mark.

Considered yourself humored, Mark.        jt

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Re: Sometimes in poetry
« Reply #36 on: May 12, 2019, 05:29:29 PM »
I see you posted something new on this thread since the last time I looked in on it. I was not informed---I must stay informed :o

Is it possible I clicked on the opt-out link? how do I undo it?