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Offline BettyBoop

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A poem for Steve Irwin
« on: December 21, 2006, 09:40:37 AM »
Hi,
This is my first post; the poem I have written is for Steve Irwin who I think was Fab! I am hoping to send this off to Australia Zoo once I have improved it with your help.
This is what I have so far:

The crocodile hunter, Steve Irwin,
Was great on telly, helping our learnin,’
Saving dangerous animals, like snakes and crocs,
To catch them he designed a special box.

Steve would shout ‘Crocs rule!’
Even in funny shorts, he was always really cool,
He loved working at the Australia Zoo,
Even if it meant mucking out the poo!

Steve Irwin was full of life,
And had himself, Terry, a lovely wife,
Steve would call a viper, ‘A grumpy little fella,’
Just be careful, you don’t want one in your cellar.

I hope you like my poem, and if you have any ideas so that I can improve it please let me know.
Thanks BettyBoop.  ;D
« Last Edit: December 22, 2006, 11:46:08 AM by BettyBoop »

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Re: A poem for Steve Irwin
« Reply #1 on: December 21, 2006, 10:08:09 AM »
this poem is really good and describes him so well  :'(

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Re: A poem for Steve Irwin
« Reply #2 on: December 21, 2006, 10:47:53 AM »
I love it.  ;D

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Re: A poem for Steve Irwin
« Reply #3 on: December 21, 2006, 11:12:36 AM »
I quite like it, but I always think light verse works better if you have a nice smooth rhythm established.  This is a bit bumpy in places - have you tried reading it aloud to see where it catches?  (sorry, hope that's not too obvious a thing to say).

I think this could be really fun/funny with some work.  I particularly like the ending (and I wasn't even a Steve Irwin fan - the only thing I knew about him was the clips of him dangling his baby boy in front of a crocodile, and ...  oh dear.  probably best not to go there with a fan.)

"You do not need to leave your room. Remain sitting at your table and listen. Do not even listen, simply wait, be quiet still and solitary. The world will freely offer itself to you to be unmasked, it has no choice, it will roll in ecstasy at your feet." - Kafka

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Re: A poem for Steve Irwin
« Reply #4 on: December 21, 2006, 11:17:55 AM »
Thanks for the coments, it's a work in progress and after your help it will be great. Additionally, I am thinking of sending it to the Australia Zoo (just an idea)  :)
« Last Edit: December 21, 2006, 12:16:46 PM by BettyBoop »

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Re: A poem for Steve Irwin
« Reply #5 on: December 21, 2006, 12:35:08 PM »
Having just come back from Oz I managed to get Steve Irwin's The Official Tribute and inside there is a poem written by Rupert McCall

I cant print it all but the first verse goes like this


Endless visions fill my head - this man- as large as life
And instantly my heart mourns for his angels and his wife
Because the way I see Steve Irwin - just put everything aside
It comes back to his family - it comes back to his pride


The last line says

As sure as 'Crikey' fills the sky
I think we'll miss ya Steve - goodbye

The pictures in the brochure are wonderful.   I saw Terri Irwin and Bindi whilst I was there at the zoo.   Its quite a long way out of Brisbane, but we were on our way to Bundaberg and the zoo happened to be on our route.   It was very expensive to get in around A$95   In UK pounds that's 25 approx. each for two persons

The Crocoseum is huge where Steve used to perform - I booked my holiday with him in mind and he went and died on me before I could get there!!   I was gutted.

OK Im sure Terri Irwin will carry on where Steve left off - she looked good and Bindi is doing well with her fitness video for kids!!

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« Last Edit: December 21, 2006, 04:34:59 PM by Lin Treadgold »

Offline HermannTheGerman

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Re: A poem for Steve Irwin
« Reply #6 on: December 21, 2006, 01:55:00 PM »
Hello daughter!  Stop hogging the keyboard!  ::)

Nice poem, sweetheart.  Some good words in Lin's post - 'crikey' and 'Crocoseum' (get that into your poem and rhyme with it).  I think a verse for the Irwin family and his best mate, Wes, would be a nice way to round it up.

We'll read it to each other to get the rhythm sorted.

Dad  :-*

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Re: A poem for Steve Irwin
« Reply #7 on: December 21, 2006, 02:06:37 PM »
http://www.rhymezone.com/r/rhyme.cgi?Word=swing&typeofrhyme=perfect&org1=syl&org2=l



Hello, if I'm doing this right then this is a web sight that will find words to rhyme for you. Just type in the word and a list will come up.

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Re: A poem for Steve Irwin
« Reply #8 on: December 21, 2006, 02:56:06 PM »
HI Betty Boop, I loved your poem, I liked Steve too. He was very brave and bought us a lot of entertainment.
I'm sure he would be over the moon with your lovely poem.
Who said cats can't dance.

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Re: A poem for Steve Irwin
« Reply #9 on: December 21, 2006, 03:43:11 PM »
Well I am thinking of sending off my poem to the Australia Zoo, and mabye Terry will replie. Anyway, I'm glad for the comments and thank you Candy Floss for the website it will come in very handy, when I am stuck on words.
BettyBoop.

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Re: A poem for Steve Irwin
« Reply #10 on: December 22, 2006, 03:11:58 PM »
 Hi Candy,

 Nice find. Thanks for posting that website link. (rhyming words). That's pretty cool.
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