Author Topic: Leap  (Read 972 times)

Offline JKK

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« on: May 17, 2018, 07:55:39 PM »
The surface stirs.
A steadily rising threat
like the steadily rising fog

A fleeting heartbeat moves
swiftly through forests and
ferns, eager

Dwindling on the
edge of a cobweb,
forever waiting.

It blinks.

Youíre free,
then youíre lost.
JKK :)

Offline dlp

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Re: Leap
« Reply #1 on: July 04, 2018, 10:12:18 PM »
I like the last stanza.  I don't understand the lay,lift,love thing.  does it relate the the verse under it?

Offline Mark T

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Re: Leap
« Reply #2 on: July 05, 2018, 03:03:23 AM »

It's a poetic device. Alliteration for a start. And then those words serve to introduce each stanza, characterizing the tone of the forthcoming sequence of emotion-events. They also add a rhythm by slowing the pace down at intervals. The blink breaks the pattern, indicating a shift to a new paradigm which then betrays itself. Like obtaining the unobtainable object of one's love worship and then being disappointed by reality.