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48/20 -- A Response to "35/10" by Sharon Olds
5 (20.8%)
Stupid -- A Response to “Genius” by Lucy Maud Montgomery
2 (8.3%)
Manifest West -- A Response to “Voyage West” by Archibald Mac Leish
5 (20.8%)
This Be the Worst -- A Response To This Be the Verse by Philip Larkin
3 (12.5%)
All Things Must End -- A Response to “Do Not Go Gentle into That Good Night” by Dylan Thomas
7 (29.2%)
Untitled -- A Response to The Ballad of Reading Gaol by Oscar Wilde
1 (4.2%)
Divine -- A Response to A Divine Image by William Blake
1 (4.2%)

Total Members Voted: 9

Voting closed: December 22, 2017, 04:34:41 PM

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Offline Tom 10

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Vote! Poetry Challenge #151 Response Poem
« on: December 15, 2017, 04:34:41 PM »
Alrighty voters -- here we go!!  The time-honored response poem is tackled by the MWC writers!

I proudly present this tremendous array of poems.  Google will quickly fetch you the text of the poems to which these gems respond.  It is amazing how well these poems stand on their own, and yet feel so strongly to be a child of the first poem. :)  You are encouraged to read the first poems in conjunction with these fabulous responses to get the entire context, experience.

i hope you savor these marvels as much as I did as they were coming in.   :)

Thank you, authors, for the richness and pleasure.

[Note to authors:  I did my best to faithfully reproduce here what you sent me.  If there are typos / errors to correct, please contact me immediately and please accept my apologies.]

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A Response to 35/10 by Sharon Olds

   48/20   

Maybe it's the walkway, slick with sleet
in December, and her steady, fleece-strong hand
already there for you as she continues the tale
of her day, or her easy reach when the can opener
hits the hardwood, miles away. It's certainly when
she lifts the bag of rock salt, or cleans the tops
of cupboards, nimble as new poplar in the wind,
bending, singing, with all the breath of youth.
The bands of muscle, sinew,  tendon-- all working
supple, springing quick, compliant, as your spine
corrupts, crumbles like limestone. You may lose
inches, dignity, collagen-- but she is there in
blood-thick gene obeisance, she has felt
the love descend, ancient: from your shoulder,
forearm, hand-- through the hairbrush, to her blonde,
her scalp, into the chamber you once constructed:
where it echoes: Woman. Mother. Same.

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A Response to Genius by Lucy Maud Montgomery

   Stupid

They exist; they’re real; they’re everywhere
Aimlessly walking from here to there
Mumbling gibberish of who knows what
While observing the world with a cold blank stare.

“Stupid Is As Stupid Does”
Is nothing new, its just the buzz
That age old warning
From them that was.

Whatever you do, don’t ask them questions
They will smile and give you bad directions
Or out of the blue they will ask
“Why do oranges come in sections?”

They see everything with vacuous eyes
They think with a brain that is not very wise   
They ponder the deep mysteries of life
Like are those sweet potato or pumpkin pies?

“He means well” people like to say
Or “Bless her heart” when she goes away
We shake our heads in disbelief
But stupid people, I guess, are here to stay.

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A Response to Voyage West by Archibald Mac Leish

   Manifest West

A coast curves into mystery
or mountains shrouded--
perhaps the land has all been mapped
oceans plumbed and known,
but not to me.

Midnight, scent of flowers
still fresh on salt water
drifted from some island
or a hawk soars down calling

stirs my belief that somewhere
there is a country yet to be discovered
and we might some day journey far enough
to find a way to change direction.

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A Response To This Be the Verse by Philip Larkin

   This be the Worst

They fuck you up
your kids do, they do
they dont mean to
but......

sleepless nights
smelly nappies all over and
vomit down your best suit
chocolate fingers smear
the off-white sofa............

and later
the first fight at school
worried sick that everything is ok
an inappropriate comment
a swear word when special guests are round

Dont even think about
teenage years, when they are out
who with and where, who knows
they fuck you up your kids do
they don't mean to........
do they?

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A response to Do Not Go Gentle into that Good Night by Dylan Thomas

   All things must end

Night isn't sweet but I won't rage
against the dying of the light.
All days must end

As shadows lengthen and my eyes grow tired
I have to follow nature's call.
Night isn't sweet but I won't rage.

I brush my teeth, turn off the lights,
reluctant, but there's no escape.
All days must end.

The sheets unwelcoming and cold
do nothing to appease my soul.
Night isn't sweet but I won't rage.

I close my eyes and sleep invades.
There's no escape;
all days must end.

Ghosts of the past encroach, they
hunt me in my sleep.
Night isn't sweet but I won't rage.
All things must end.

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A Response to The Ballad of Reading Gaol by Oscar Wilde

   Untitled

I didn't kill the thing I love
 Please listen to my words,
I didn't pull a cranky face,
 Or flatter you absurd,
The coward does it with a kiss,
 He'll French it up, then you'll be interred.

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A response to A Divine Image by William Blake

   Divine

Empathy has a Human heart
And gentleness a Human Face,
Graceful the Human Form Divine,
And invitation, the Human Dress.

The Human Dress is delicate petal,
The Human Form, a robust stem,
The Human Face, a revealing blossom
The Human Heart, its rosy glow.

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Re: Sticky: Vote! Poetry Challenge #151 Response Poem
« Reply #1 on: December 16, 2017, 04:58:03 PM »
Great stuff here! Can't make up my mind, it is a difficult choice... I'll have to come back to it...

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Re: Sticky: Vote! Poetry Challenge #151 Response Poem
« Reply #2 on: December 17, 2017, 04:01:19 PM »
Made my choice but it was hard. All are really good ones.

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Re: Sticky: Vote! Poetry Challenge #151 Response Poem
« Reply #3 on: December 17, 2017, 04:20:45 PM »
Aren't they a magnificent collection of works?
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Re: Sticky: Vote! Poetry Challenge #151 Response Poem
« Reply #4 on: December 17, 2017, 07:50:43 PM »
My Russian friends were not available, so I could not vote as many times as I wanted to, but I got one in, so there you go!

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Re: Sticky: Vote! Poetry Challenge #151 Response Poem
« Reply #5 on: December 17, 2017, 07:54:00 PM »
 ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
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Re: Sticky: Vote! Poetry Challenge #151 Response Poem
« Reply #6 on: December 22, 2017, 12:34:14 AM »
Amazing efforts, Poets!  As we draw toward the end, I want to again thank you for such wonderful poeming.  You guys are good.  :) :)  And we readers/voters are the beneficiaries.

Authors -- when this closes, make your way over to the Red Barren - drinks are on CorneliusPoe. 
Just put them on his tab.

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Re: Sticky: Vote! Poetry Challenge #151 Response Poem
« Reply #7 on: December 22, 2017, 01:36:08 PM »
Amazing efforts, Poets!  As we draw toward the end, I want to again thank you for such wonderful poeming.  You guys are good.  :) :)  And we readers/voters are the beneficiaries.

Authors -- when this closes, make your way over to the Red Barren - drinks are on CorneliusPoe. 
Just put them on his tab.
;D ;D ;D ;D

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Re: Sticky: Vote! Poetry Challenge #151 Response Poem
« Reply #8 on: December 22, 2017, 03:08:37 PM »
Well thank you Kate!  You're buying a round as well - very nice of you.  ;D
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Re: Sticky: Vote! Poetry Challenge #151 Response Poem
« Reply #9 on: December 22, 2017, 07:46:24 PM »
Congrats to Dansinger!  Winner of #151!


I loved each of the poems as they came in- it's one of the best perks of hosting, but when Dansinger's came in - I thought - Wow, a villanelle - this will be hard to top, but I wonder whether the voters will be tuned into how difficult, and how it parallels so well the work by Dylan Thomas (whoever he was ;D ;D ).


Anywhoo, great stuff Dansinger!
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Re: Vote! Poetry Challenge #151 Response Poem
« Reply #10 on: December 23, 2017, 05:05:35 AM »
Thanks Tom. And a big thank you to all who voted for my poem.

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Re: Vote! Poetry Challenge #151 Response Poem
« Reply #11 on: December 24, 2017, 09:47:57 AM »
Good poem. Got my vote. Congrats!

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Re: Vote! Poetry Challenge #151 Response Poem
« Reply #12 on: December 24, 2017, 10:02:32 AM »
Thank you.

Now go write a villanelle. :D
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