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Offline REW

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Re: National Poetry Month Celebration [juvenile & adult language/themes]
« Reply #600 on: April 29, 2017, 10:16:19 PM »
#30
Up close, green leaves dominated,
furrowed to attention, in line
flower heads faced me,
bug eyed, as if frightened.
The more I looked
the more I thought
it wasn't fear,
they were simply in awe of themselves,
of just being.

Not content with a few,
my greedy eyes
opened towards their horizon.
The field, vast,
gradually condensed them to solid yellow,
I can't remember how blue the sky was
or what trees separated them.

I do remember sensing them as I would a creature,
could feel their collective wonder,
their perception that time exists
and knowledge that
for them it would end

immersed in their bright sadness.


Running on empty after nearly a month I closed my eyes, put the TV on mute, waited a minute, then pressed pause.
The image that faced me would be my next poem.
It was a huge field of sunflowers, all harmoniously orientated. The more I studied them, the more they became personified.
  

 



You liar!!!!  Hahaha an inspiring image of sunflowers popped up after a random mute/pause/1 minute rest/unpause.  Interesting tactic for inspiration.  It worked out in your favor.  I love it.
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Re: National Poetry Month Celebration [juvenile & adult language/themes]
« Reply #601 on: April 29, 2017, 10:30:08 PM »
Seriously REW!
I was hoping for something darker...but this image appeared. They were fabulous, and I began to see personalities in their faces.
There is something special about them though.
To live, with gentle but cunning deceit, and accept the consequences, is the destiny of every man.

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Re: National Poetry Month Celebration [juvenile & adult language/themes]
« Reply #602 on: April 29, 2017, 10:43:00 PM »
Thank you, Drab. The caps are a result of my Office Word programming and I forgot to change them.
You are right. This could be several poems.
Here are the gory details and missing information that I kept adding on, switching around, and confusing myself with so it didn't seem to work.  I apologize for the vulgarity but she was a horrible person and those words, as raw and unladylike as they are, seem to fit.
The Difference Between You and the Dung Beetle

I think Dung Beetles are cool  :)
And this is much better.
There was so little time to spend on critique this month. Now it's almost over you can send it to RMP for critical analysis.
We were all very nice to each other in April...the gloves will be off in May...let the real games recommence  ;D
To live, with gentle but cunning deceit, and accept the consequences, is the destiny of every man.

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Re: National Poetry Month Celebration [juvenile & adult language/themes]
« Reply #603 on: April 30, 2017, 04:30:11 AM »
Nearly done for the month, it's been a pleasant trip with good company.

Here's a short walk on the dark side as my penultimate offering.

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NaPo 29

No Second Place

I gave my youngest a short bladed knife,
told her it was a tool, not a weapon.
I saw her smile, weigh it in her hand,
quietly pleased that I trusted her.
Then I said, "But..."

I gave her the quick lesson,
the hidden grip,
the best target,
the decisive step,
the short swing with no warning.
Followed by the tactical retreat
and the walk away.

She smiled, but her eyes were serious.
"I'll probably never need to do that."

"I hope not.  I truly hope not.
But it you ever do, it's not a game."

She's a sensible girl,
already knows how to avoid trouble,
to talk her way clear,
and how to break bones if necessary.
But I'd be failing my duty as a father
if I didn't prepare her for the chance,
for the once in a lifetime encounter
when charm, wisdom, and decency
have to meet the dark side head on.

When there's no second place.

Gyppo
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Re: National Poetry Month Celebration [juvenile & adult language/themes]
« Reply #604 on: April 30, 2017, 04:40:21 AM »


The Difference Between You and the Dung Beetle

I imagine you dropkick kittens.


Deb, the whole thing is good, but that one line works well because it's the only bit of speculation amongst all the definite details.  It's almost a throwaway, yet the effect is anything but.

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Re: National Poetry Month Celebration [juvenile & adult language/themes]
« Reply #605 on: April 30, 2017, 04:48:03 AM »
Drab,

Really enjoyed your list of things to do in fifty-five minutes.

I'd probably, and predictably, write something.  Maybe writ large on a wall, with a scarlet aerosol can.  A final scream of defiance from someone unwilling to go quietly.

Something like "Damn, I'm not ready yet!"
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Re: National Poetry Month Celebration [juvenile & adult language/themes]
« Reply #606 on: April 30, 2017, 05:20:26 AM »

Scars


It is a good day to believe
time is a wide cloth
full of holes.

Hold tight.
Hold tight.
Hold tight.


A lyrical description of raw nerve endings as the numbness wears off and you slowly start to grow a new skin.

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Re: National Poetry Month Celebration [juvenile & adult language/themes]
« Reply #607 on: April 30, 2017, 08:11:23 AM »
Not a good day for a last minute dash, so here's number thirty.  All neatly tied up with time to spare.

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NaPo 30

Fallow

It's a sombre day today.
Not sad, or melancholy,
or bitter, or even resigned.
Just sombre.

A day for serious thoughts
and reflections.
For weighing and balancing,
checking the load for equilibrium.
Considering options,
laying the groundwork for plans,
but not yet planning.

A limbo day,
between past and future,
a self-contained bubble of now
set aside from the flow of life.

Sometimes people,
just like a nutrient-stripped field
which has grown too much,
too fast, need a break,
to allow recovery.
To lie fallow for a while.

This is such a day,
and to ignore the signs would be folly.

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Re: National Poetry Month Celebration [juvenile & adult language/themes]
« Reply #608 on: April 30, 2017, 08:22:48 AM »
Drab,

Really enjoyed your list of things to do in fifty-five minutes.

I'd probably, and predictably, write something.  Maybe writ large on a wall, with a scarlet aerosol can.  A final scream of defiance from someone unwilling to go quietly.

Something like "Damn, I'm not ready yet!"

Thanks Gyppo.
There are so many things we could do, or think we'd do  :)
Loved the contrast between the very casual/light way #29 reads and the terrible incident it contemplates.
Liked it a lot.
Regards
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Re: National Poetry Month Celebration [juvenile & adult language/themes]
« Reply #609 on: April 30, 2017, 08:27:54 AM »
Gyppo, you certainly finished with a flourish.
It's sad and wise and reads nicely.
Some excellent lines here.
I especially liked 'to lie fallow for a while'
Well done.
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Re: National Poetry Month Celebration [juvenile & adult language/themes]
« Reply #610 on: April 30, 2017, 09:49:14 AM »
Thank you Gyppo. :)
I've missed a few days but here's my last one guys

Now and then

Poetry was fingers stained blue with ink
it was pencils chewed to the core
and erased words hardly visible
lines crossed and replaced
margins lively with ideas
doodles and scribbles
dusty smell of paper.
A selfish pleasure.

It is now a bright screen full of signs
aching wrists and shoulders
and sore dried out eyes.
It is the clicking song
of an old keyboard
or the grinding
of a printer.
And share.

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Re: National Poetry Month Celebration [juvenile & adult language/themes]
« Reply #611 on: April 30, 2017, 10:54:35 AM »
Catherine, you've triggered a bonus with one of your lines.

Cheers, M'Dear.

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NaPo 31

The clicking song of an old keyboard?

It is a song, isn't it?
Rhythmic but never mechanically perfect.
A subtle blend of micro-pauses
and brief flurries, cradled
amongst the background rhythm.
The pause of a repeated letter,
held down for a fraction longer
instead of double-tapped
as they teach in typing schools.
Revealing the idiosyncrasies
of personal style,
or two arthritic fingers,
lagging slightly behind the others,
which are still supple and obedient.

In the typewriter days
the song of the keys was lost,
buried amongst the patter
of mechanical type-bars,
squashing the inky ribbon
against paper and platen.
Punctuated with the end of line ting,
and the rasp of the carriage return.
It was a more physical thing,
with an audible reward
for each line completed.

Now it's the same old song,
set to a slightly different tune.

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Re: National Poetry Month Celebration [juvenile & adult language/themes]
« Reply #612 on: April 30, 2017, 12:01:45 PM »
Now it's the same old song,
set to a slightly different tune.


I loved that sound  ;)

So glad a line of mine triggered a Gyppo's poem  :)

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Re: National Poetry Month Celebration [juvenile & adult language/themes]
« Reply #613 on: April 30, 2017, 12:30:59 PM »
You're welcome.  You never know when or where the muse will strike.  You just have to be receptive to it.
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Re: National Poetry Month Celebration [juvenile & adult language/themes]
« Reply #614 on: April 30, 2017, 01:32:18 PM »

To this spontaneous community of NaPo celebrants:

Firstly--  I marvel at the way each writer took this thread and made it their own, whether with one poem, a cluster, or a full faith of thirty.  The variety and richness of the contributions and quality of writing is beyond expectation.  I am enriched and humbled to have had the privilege of sharing this experience, this voyage, with each of you.  Thank you.  

Secondly-- You recall the current Poetry Challenge is accepting NaPo-posted poems.  Please, please, please self-select from your poems and PM to me as many as you'd like.  For some of you more prolific posters, I expect to receive 4-6 of your best.  Let's make this Poetry Challenge a showcase of what we have done together this last 30 days.  The voting is secondary -- just make sure your poems appear alongside those of your fellow NaPo'ers as a tribute to them as much as your own work.

Thirdly-- My poems number is over 30, so this one doesnít count, and besides, I first wrote it for NaPo three years ago.  But Iíve revised and reposted at the end of NaPo each year since.  So hereís this yearís edit:


    Period In Italics.

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