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Please enjoy these very fine entries and vote for your favorite.  Winner will be announced on Friday March 31st.

Shit, Shit, Shitola
10 (76.9%)
The next morning
3 (23.1%)

Total Members Voted: 12

Voting closed: April 01, 2017, 08:12:22 PM

Author Topic: A winner has been declared Poetry Challenge #148  (Read 4189 times)

Offline REW

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A winner has been declared Poetry Challenge #148
« on: March 26, 2017, 08:12:22 PM »
Option #1

Shit, Shit, Shitola

PARST ONE

[stanza break]
(too soon, but piss on it)
 
Drunk and disorderly I know –
Argumentative, ballistic, a real peach I become
Smarter, righter, and truth be told, much-much
Insistently louder.
 
Drunk and horny I know –
Amorous, friend-friendly [boing], a real warmster
Obsessive, seriously pointed, and truth be told
A heat-seeking missile.
 
Drunk and confused I know –
Fuzz-brained, stumbling, a passable cliché
Dumber, blinder, and truth be told
A total tool.
 
But drunk and poetic?
There’s no such thing.  Pass me the bong.
I’m giving up the poetic-words hunt
I’m fukcing drunk and still at the loss.
[insert rhyme with bunt/toss or thong]
 

SECTION B

Thank you morning wine, thank you  
Whiskey in my coffee. Thank you too [whoo-hooo!]
Gin to pad my afternoon, and thank you
Drambuie for your kind company this night whilst
I wait for my allegory to be delivered
By the buxomish creature I imagine as
my personal musey-muse. What a babe.

Where was I?


FINALE

Pisses me off, hey.

I got drunk to write this
The rules reuqire and you know me - a rules guy.
So I wait for the allegory, the metaphors central and subsidiary
Some assonance and consonance [mostly assonance] and what the clammer–
I'll settle for a floatable simile, or some reasonable metre,
or a favoured, honoured, flavoured, sonoured
bit of fuckwhatever.  That's it!

I'm waiting for fuckwhatever.

Whatever that may be.

& where's my muse and that

fabulous bosom? or bosoms?
singular, pular? My gawd

I'm drunk.

___________________________________________________________

Option # 2

The next morning

Her scent lingers on the sheets
ok, they're blankets,
anywho, happy days,
she improved the aroma.
At least I think, hope
it was a she.
Things blur a lot nowadays,
maybe I'm gender fluid...
I think that's what they call it
when
you drink too much,
can't remember and
find liquid signatures
in your bed
or
your
unusual places!!

« Last Edit: April 02, 2017, 03:23:32 AM by fire-fly »
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Could a moderator please sticky the poll?  Thank you.
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Come on and vote!
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Offline Gyppo

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I really liked them both, a lot, but at gut-level there was one very clear leader.  In matters of dispute, in poetry, I'll always go with the visceral response.

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I really liked them both, a lot, but at gut-level there was one very clear leader.  In matters of dispute, in poetry, I'll always go with the visceral response.

Gyppo

Yep me too!
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Maybe I should close the poll early???  A strong lead has been displayed...unless voters come out in droves now to create a surprise upset.
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I'd let it run.  In the past some early leads have turned into draws needing a tie-breaker vote.  Not usually, but it has happened.  Leave it alone and then both contenders will know they've had their full chance.

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A Winner Has Been Declared

Thank you for the 13 voters who contributed to a solid win by poet Tom10 in Poetry Challenge #148.

And especially a thank you for the two poets who entered the challenge.
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Re: Sticky: A winner has been declared Poetry Challenge #148
« Reply #8 on: March 31, 2017, 07:41:19 PM »
Congratulations Tom  :)
To live, with gentle but cunning deceit, and accept the consequences, is the destiny of every man.

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Re: Sticky: A winner has been declared Poetry Challenge #148
« Reply #9 on: March 31, 2017, 08:48:07 PM »
Thank you Rev.  I really liked the other poem and voted for that one.

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Re: Sticky: A winner has been declared Poetry Challenge #148
« Reply #10 on: April 01, 2017, 05:06:53 AM »
I thought it was probably a 'Tom' poem.
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Re: Sticky: A winner has been declared Poetry Challenge #148
« Reply #11 on: April 01, 2017, 08:35:38 AM »
I thought it was probably a 'Tom' poem.

ditto

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Re: Sticky: A winner has been declared Poetry Challenge #148
« Reply #12 on: April 02, 2017, 12:04:55 AM »
Seriously -- am I that predictable??

Didn't the [UK] misspellings discuise anything?
« Last Edit: April 02, 2017, 12:07:39 AM by Tom 10 »

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Re: Sticky: A winner has been declared Poetry Challenge #148
« Reply #13 on: April 02, 2017, 02:37:10 AM »
Well done, Tom.

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Re: Sticky: A winner has been declared Poetry Challenge #148
« Reply #14 on: April 02, 2017, 06:45:45 AM »
Seriously -- am I that predictable??

Didn't the [UK] misspellings discuise anything?


Not predictable, but it just had the 'feel' of a Tom poem.  But don't ask me to define why ;-)
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