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Offline Mark T

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« on: February 16, 2017, 04:21:07 PM »

Ahead,
a void
needing
gravitas
and thought.

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Re: 7
« Reply #1 on: February 16, 2017, 10:47:39 PM »
I don't get it.

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« Reply #2 on: February 17, 2017, 08:51:13 PM »
Don't think about it too much  ;D

4
Ahead,
avoid
solemn
thoughts.

Who needs 7 minute abs when you can have 4 minute abs!  ;D

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Re: 7
« Reply #3 on: February 17, 2017, 08:54:46 PM »
That didn't help.

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« Reply #4 on: February 17, 2017, 08:58:43 PM »
It's something we do here on occasion...it's called having fun!
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Re: 7
« Reply #5 on: February 17, 2017, 09:43:44 PM »
And here I thought it was poetry to be reviewed . . .

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« Reply #6 on: February 17, 2017, 10:09:45 PM »
Chill out please!
You haven't been around RMP for a while; do take time to observe the way things work here.
As I said...we do try to have fun.
So you've reappeared...that's just great! And you use sarcasm, that's great too.
We've obviously got off to a bad start. Let's stop now...really. Please do not communicate with me again.
Apologies for the hijack Mark  ;D
To live, with gentle but cunning deceit, and accept the consequences, is the destiny of every man.

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Re: 7
« Reply #7 on: February 17, 2017, 10:14:28 PM »
"Chill out"?

Physician, heal thyself, Drab.
« Last Edit: February 17, 2017, 10:35:42 PM by Lon Palmer »

Offline Mark T

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Re: 7
« Reply #8 on: February 18, 2017, 01:21:00 AM »

It's about that fairly fucking obvious and well-worn theme, death.

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« Reply #9 on: February 18, 2017, 06:01:34 AM »
Well that's obvious!
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Re: 7
« Reply #10 on: February 18, 2017, 08:14:12 AM »
And the title?

Just curious.

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« Reply #11 on: February 18, 2017, 01:36:23 PM »

Howdy Lon, welcome back... the title is weak, just the number of words as drab indicated, but continuing the minimalist approach.

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« Reply #12 on: February 18, 2017, 01:39:00 PM »
. . . which makes thematic sense, especially if you are equating death with the void.

I wonder if there is a better word than "needing".
« Last Edit: February 18, 2017, 01:40:40 PM by Lon Palmer »

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« Reply #13 on: February 18, 2017, 01:51:15 PM »

Me too. Any suggestions? Would prefer two syllables. Thanks for comments to you and drab.

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« Reply #14 on: February 18, 2017, 06:50:02 PM »
"Craving"?