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Offline AntonioM

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Black Bodies Depart
« on: January 01, 2017, 04:16:16 PM »
For Oliver Wendell Holmes, Jr, and them

Men, be still in your graves.
The justices are waiting,
the jury pool is begging
your murderers are fading
into the back of our minds
the heinousness of crime
your blackness defined,
confined, denied, refined,
radiant mahoganies
now, stiff as the pines--
the part they don't mind,
if you would just be still.
« Last Edit: January 02, 2017, 06:34:20 AM by AntonioM »
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Re: Black Bodies Depart
« Reply #1 on: January 02, 2017, 05:25:43 AM »

Good work, ARM. Captures the zeitgeist well and the rap-like structure is a good frame to hang this on. The piece is well-written and enjoyably accessible - I see this is more so with your political takes than the sociological and the personal - the access, I mean. From my POV, there's a real sense of increasing racial division in the USA, apparently orchestrated by a deep state agenda, along with all the other divide and conquer tactics. You people need to get your shit together because the problem with all this instant global communication and rage-clicking etc, is that it's all too easy for such attitudes to be exported to relatively peaceful but mixed societies.         

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Re: Black Bodies Depart
« Reply #2 on: January 02, 2017, 07:32:21 PM »
that's awesome. like the 'refined.'

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Re: Black Bodies Depart
« Reply #3 on: January 11, 2017, 11:22:54 AM »
Hi ARM,

Another strong statement-poem.  My favorite passage: radiant mahoganies / now, stiff as the pines--
I didn't see the Holmes connection, unless he is intended as fill-in representative of traditional white man jurisprudence.   

Thanks for posting.

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Re: Black Bodies Depart
« Reply #4 on: January 11, 2017, 02:48:01 PM »
Thanks, I just used a few of Holmes' sentiments from
his "Daily Trials by a Sensitive Man"

https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems-and-poets/poems/detail/44381
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« Reply #5 on: January 11, 2017, 05:17:54 PM »
Excellent poem you link to.  I can see its connection to Black Bodies Depart.  But Daily Trials by a Sensitive Man was authored by Oliver Wendell Holmes, Sr, and your epigram references his son, Oliver Wendell Holmes, Jr. That threw me off, as OWH, Jr. was a US Supreme Court Justice for about 30 years.  I took the reference in the epigram and L.2  to Junior, and having something to do with some of his legal decisions or positions, as in Buck v. Bell, for example.  

It makes sense now, thanks.

T
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« Reply #6 on: January 11, 2017, 09:42:23 PM »
Yea, i meant to invoke both 😋 that comma doesn't do enough work... Lol
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« Reply #7 on: January 11, 2017, 10:36:41 PM »
ha- i need to read more closely.  :)
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Re: Black Bodies Depart
« Reply #8 on: January 13, 2017, 05:08:17 AM »
Hi
Thannks for the reference, the poem certainly improved for me with that background. Good writing.
Dave