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Offline Jetlir

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JON (TV Pilot) w/ Justin Bieber n Paul McCartney
« on: September 25, 2016, 04:44:00 PM »
INT. LAPD - MINUTES LATER - DAY 2

Justin and Ryan are at the LAPD. Ryan is talking to an
officer while Justin is sitting behind him waiting and
recording Ryan.

                    JUSTIN (O.S)
          Ryanís talking to an officer. We
          are going to visit Jon.. of
          course he has no idea, so letís
          see how this turns up!

Ryan gives Justin a sign telling him to follow up.

                    JUSTIN (O.S)
               (to Ryan)
          Yep..
               (shows himself smiling)
There we go!

Justinís holding the camera down so he wouldnít be noticed
heís recording, always trying to hold it straight. We can
here them talking off screen.

                    OFFICER STENNETT (O.S)
               (to Justin)
          Itís his first day here and you
          put him in jail? Not cool Justin
          Bieber.

                    JUSTIN (O.S)
               (laughs)
          I know, right?

                    RYAN (O.S)
          This is so crazy.

                    OFFICER STENNETT (O.S)
          He seems to be a nice guy though.
          Very calm and.. respectful.

                    RYAN (O.S)
          Iím sure he hates us right now.
               (to Justin)
          Especially you!

                    JUSTIN (O.S)
          Nah.. I donít think he does. I
          feel like I know him already.

                    RYAN (O.S)
What?
                    OFFICER STENNETT (O.S)
          You know him already?

                    JUSTIN (O.S)
          Yeah.. I mean.. -- never mind.
          Letís just see how heís doing.
Officer stops by a dark black door and opens it.

                    OFFICER STENNETT (O.S)
          There you go guys. Get in here
          and wait till I bring him in.
Justin and Ryan get in.

                    JUSTIN (O.S)
               (to Officer Stennett)
          Donít tell him about us!

OFFICER STENNETT (O.S)
Wonít!

Officer closes the door and walks away. Ryan and Justin
are inside the "Visitors Room".

                    RYAN
          Perfect! Iím pretty sure he
          wouldnít want to see us!

                    JUSTIN (O.S)
          What are you talking about? Who
          wouldnít want to see Justin
          Bieber?

                    RYAN
               (smiles)
Whatever.

Offline Jetlir

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Re: JON (TV Pilot) w/ Justin Bieber n Paul McCartney
« Reply #1 on: September 25, 2016, 04:45:50 PM »
What do you guys think of this?

Offline Jetlir

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Re: JON (TV Pilot) w/ Justin Bieber n Paul McCartney
« Reply #2 on: September 25, 2016, 04:58:57 PM »
I would like to show you the full pilot! Anyone interested?

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Re: JON (TV Pilot) w/ Justin Bieber n Paul McCartney
« Reply #3 on: September 25, 2016, 05:13:10 PM »
I would like to show you the full pilot! Anyone interested?

You have to be kidding us. Right?

H3K

Offline Jetlir

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Re: JON (TV Pilot) w/ Justin Bieber n Paul McCartney
« Reply #4 on: September 25, 2016, 05:21:58 PM »
I forgot to mention that this is how the story begins. With Bieber and McCartney! Every next episode has different artists.

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Re: JON (TV Pilot) w/ Justin Bieber n Paul McCartney
« Reply #5 on: September 25, 2016, 05:23:10 PM »
and this part of the script is at page 26!

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Re: JON (TV Pilot) w/ Justin Bieber n Paul McCartney
« Reply #6 on: September 25, 2016, 05:27:20 PM »
HERE'S SOMEWHERE AT PAGE 3

JON (CONTíD)
               (in English; to camera)
          And.. how I was telling you.. Yes
          -- I am making something like a
          documentary, but not like.. you
          know..boring, this is going to be
          epic, for sure it will get one
          million views on YouTube.

Mikel walks by, comes back curious, slowly gets in and
approaches. Jon is not aware Mikel is behind him watching.

                    JON (CONTíD)
               (in English; smiling; to
               camera)

          And I will get more followers on
          Instagram for sure. And --

Mikel steps into the conversation while looking at the
camera. Scares the hell out of Jon.

                    MIKEL
               (smiling)
          What are you doing?

JON (scared)
          What the hell? Dad! Why you never
          knock?

                    MIKEL
               (smiling)
          The door was open! I was just
          curious to see who youíre talking
          to.

JON (calmed)
          Well, I could have been --

                    MIKEL
          Watching them videos? Like that
time w --
                    JON
               (agitated)
          What? -- No! What is wrong with
          you? God!

Mikel starts laughing.

                    JON (CONTíD)
               (angry)
          Why is that funny? Seriously dad!
          Stop.. itís not funny!

                    MIKEL
          Well, you stop watching adults
stuff kiddo.

JON (loud)
          O MY GOD! Dad stop! -- Why are we
          -- You know what? Iím not talking
          about this anymore.

Mikel looks right into the camera.

                    MIKEL
          Yeah yeah.. Can I just greet
them?

Mikel approaches. Always looking into the camera. Tries
his weird english.

                    MIKEL
               (bad English; strong accent;
               to camera)
          Hello. My name is Mikel. I am
          actor.

                    JON
          Stop! What are you doing. This is
          not a video chat.

Jon takes the camera on his hands and places it somewhere
else.
                    JON (CONTíD)
               (while placing the camera)
          And stop telling people youíre an
          actor. -- Youíre a dentist dad!

                    MIKEL
          Hey! We talked about this! I
          became a dentist, but.. I was
          born an actor!
               (to camera, making mimics)
          Iím a great actor Jon!

                    JON
          No youíre n -- Who is telling you
          that. That freak from the improv
          class? Is that weirdo telling you
          that?

                    MIKEL
          What are you talking about? Heís
a great guy..

                    JON
          Yeah right.. Whatever.. Letís go
          now. Iím all set.

                    MIKEL
          Okay. Perfect. Iíll get your
          luggage to the car.

JON (upset)
          I donít have a luggage! -- Iím
          only taking my McKinley backpack.

                    MIKEL
          What? Are you kidding me? That
          weird hippy bag?

                    JON
               (irritated)
          Itís not -- Okay, can you just
          wait for me downstairs please?
          Please dad?

MIKEL
Fine.
Mikel leaves looking right into the camera and making
faces. Jonís now talking to the camera while trying to
stop it.

                    JON
               (in English; unhappy; to
               camera)
          I will cut this part before I
          upload it.. for sure.

Looks right into the camera, makes a fake smile and stops
recording.

END OF SUBTITLES.

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Re: JON (TV Pilot) w/ Justin Bieber n Paul McCartney
« Reply #7 on: September 25, 2016, 06:10:48 PM »
I think it would be great to see you introduce yourself here:

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