I do trust the criticism here. And I came to this site because of some strange criticism for this scene. The person said that the character should have gone to the police when her friend unknowingly found herself in the hands of vampires. I've never seen that in paranormal fantasy/horror. Anyway in this scene the main character, Loretta, sees her coworker, Theresa, jumping in the car with a woman that only Loretta knows is a vampire. Loretta tries to warn her, but Theresa rides off with them nonetheless. I should also mention that Loretta is with a husband, Craig, who doesn't believe the story either. He is bound to wheelchair.
EXT. PARKING LOT among cars - NIGHT
Coworkers yell GOODBYE to Loretta as she heads for her car. She hears Theresa calling out to her. She looks up to see her waving standing next to a vehicle.
THERESA
I want you to meet my friend!
With a broad smile Loretta walks over to the driver's side and looks in at Dale Clocker. They shake.
THERESA
Loretta, this is Dale.
LORETTA
Dale. Nice to meet you.
DALE
Likewise.
Loretta sits down and closes the door.
THERESA
We're going to check out this new club downtown
L.A. Dance a little. Some drinky poo. They say the
food's good too.
LORETTA
Sounds great. Well, break a leg you two. And let
me know the details.
DALE
If she can remember them. This one can toss 'em
down!
They all LAUGH as Theresa punches Dale's shoulder.
THERESA
You jerk! He's joking!
The talking stops as Loretta hears a VOICE coming from the DARKENED back seat.
VALERIE (O.S.)
Excuse me but could someone turn on the light back
here. I seem to have misplaced my purse.
The light's turned on. Loretta stares as Valerie looks dead in her eyes with a mocking smirk. Loretta stands petrified.
VALERIE
(a lilting voice)
Found it.
The engine starts as they pull away.
THERESA
See you Monday!
Loretta 's levity turns to desperation as she SHOUTS frantically into the moving car, following it as it backs up.
LORETTA
Theresa, get out of there! Theresa, that's
her! Get out of the car now!
Theresa looks at Loretta with bulging eyes. Dale LAUGHS out loud as he throws the gear into drive. Loretta watches as the car turns onto the street. She first walks after the car then begins running after it down the sidewalk as it rolls through traffic.
LORETTA (CONTD)
(yelling)
Theresa, get out of there! Theresa, he's not who you
think! Theresa get out of the car!
LORETTA'S P.O.V. THERESA LOOKING BACK AT HER LIKE SHE'S CRAZY.
She gives up the chase, stops and pulls her hair, pacing in circles.
INT. Living room of bungalow
She storms inside, plops down on a couch and buries her head in her hands, CRYING. She grabs a cigarette and lights it as Craig wheels himself into the living room.
CRAIG
Loretta? What's going on?
She shakes her head in frustration.
LORETTA
Nothing. Go back into the bedroom. I'll be in there
in a minute.
CRAIG
I'm supposed to just ignore that you're in here
balling your eyes out?
He wheels closer to her chair.
CRAIG
Now talk to me, baby. What's going on?
He grabs her hand for the caress as she stands up and heads over to the window, looking away.
LORETTA
Craig, it's nothing, okay. It was a hard day
at the coffee house. Wall to wall jerks.
CRAIG
No, Loretta. I happen to know you love serving
those wall to wall jerks. Now don't start shutting
me out.
Her eyes downcast, Loretta remains stubbornly silent.
CRAIG
You're my wife, baby. Talk to me.
He watches as she sits down and stares at the wall. He sadly turns and wheels his chair back into the bedroom.
