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Which one gets your vote?

Big Shim
10 (83.3%)
Internal Swelling
2 (16.7%)

Total Members Voted: 11

Voting closed: February 19, 2016, 09:57:05 PM

Author Topic: Winner Poetry #132  (Read 2334 times)

Offline 510bhan

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Winner Poetry #132
« on: February 12, 2016, 09:57:05 PM »
It's one or the other . . . which will get your vote? :o

The poll will be up for a week.
 


Big Shim

Windless in the deep
still, a wanderer across
this hillside homestead

like the pale moon across
snow, gleaming on fields
white on roofs.  

When he mummers to the horses
the barn cats edge closer.

The world swells to fill
this straw strewn stall.



Internal Swelling

The heart beats fast
To cover the sting
But adrenaline isn't made to last

Then the burning starts
Forget the stinging
A scream coming from the heart's

Pounding, panting caverns
Blood ringing
Through my ears, it churns

Up and out
Expanding
Pain, and with a shout

And as it fills my vision
The tires sing
Of the oncoming collision

Rage
Making eyes swell
Bulge
From my skull they fell

Is it ever worth it?
The way the anger burns
So the dynamite is lit
Don't we ever learn?

Let's let go of our swollen animosity
Against our fellow men
Why can't we offer our apologies
And keep our souls in zen?
« Last Edit: February 20, 2016, 01:17:42 PM by Alice, a Country Gal »

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Re: Sticky: Poetry #132: Which one gets your vote?
« Reply #1 on: February 13, 2016, 06:59:50 AM »
I'll pass on the voting  but good luck to both.
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Re: Sticky: Winner Poetry #132
« Reply #2 on: February 20, 2016, 12:30:09 PM »
Tom wins! :D :D :D :D :D Congratulations. Your contest next. ;)

Big Shim

Windless in the deep
still, a wanderer across
this hillside homestead

like the pale moon across
snow, gleaming on fields
white on roofs. 

When he mummers to the horses
the barn cats edge closer.

The world swells to fill
this straw strewn stall.

Offline Laura H

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Re: Sticky: Winner Poetry #132
« Reply #3 on: February 20, 2016, 12:55:53 PM »
Congrats to Tom!
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Re: Sticky: Winner Poetry #132
« Reply #4 on: February 20, 2016, 01:15:10 PM »
Congratulations Tom, liked you entry a lot.
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Offline Tom 10

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Re: Winner Poetry #132
« Reply #5 on: February 20, 2016, 01:41:52 PM »
Thanks Laura and Alice.
Very nice of you.

Now get to writing!! ;D ;D

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Re: Winner Poetry #132
« Reply #6 on: February 20, 2016, 01:49:36 PM »
I was going to congratulate you, but -eek! - does that mean I'll have to write a poem? It'll have to be an Ode to Ibuprofen or a Cold Virus Haiku or perhaps a Hymn to Medical Bureaucracy (though that last reference means nothing to anyone except those subject to my more recent rants :) - which I will not reproduce here :)  ).  ::) ::)
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Offline Tom 10

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Re: Winner Poetry #132
« Reply #7 on: February 20, 2016, 01:54:48 PM »

No, you're not expected to write one poem, Amie - how about some grouping in the 12-15 range - you are prolific,and just maybe there could be a little caffeine or ephedrine in your medication?? :)

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Re: Winner Poetry #132
« Reply #8 on: February 23, 2016, 06:09:43 AM »
Congrats.
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