Author Topic: Alika  (Read 172 times)

Offline sasharat

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Alika
« on: December 07, 2021, 03:06:52 PM »
Here is a poem from me :)

Once
She was
A pure white
Like thousands.  All
The same bright red eyes
A demon from heaven
Her eyes were darker than her
sister, Ginger, tell them apart
Each furry body, wriggling tail
Generic forms have personalities

I remember the background seemed light blue
My hands are cupped, holding on to her
As she falls asleep forever
I remember that I cried
I would do it again
I have no regrets
It was harder
But it was
Truly
Right



Offline Heartsongsdiary

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Re: Alika
« Reply #1 on: December 08, 2021, 10:59:01 PM »
Here is a poem from me :)

Once
She was
A pure white
Like thousands.  All
The same bright red eyes
A demon from heaven
Her eyes were darker than her
sister, Ginger, tell them apart
Each furry body, wriggling tail
Generic forms have personalities

I remember the background seemed light blue
My hands are cupped, holding on to her
As she falls asleep forever
I remember that I cried
I would do it again
I have no regrets
It was harder
But it was
Truly
Right

I have never read  a poem  formed like your "Alika":

first stanza
line 1- one vowel
line 2- two vowels
line 3- three vowels
line 4- four vowels
line 5- five vowels
line 6- six vowels
line 7- seven vowels
line 8- eight vowels
line 9- nine vowels
line 10- ten vowels

Then a second stanza written in reverse

line 1-10 vowels
line 2-  9 vowels
line 3-  8 vowels
etc.

It was an interesting read.  While reading I got the feeling that a much loved pet was dying\suffering and had to be put to sleep.    jt
Be who you are...not everyone will like you but those that matter will. jt