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Offline Gyppo

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Good Instincts
« on: July 18, 2015, 01:54:24 PM »
Good instincts

Sometimes, when I picked a place,
pulled over to camp, turned off the motor,
the silence would seem absolute.
I'd feel as if I was the first
to ever camp there.

But some sites are so natural,
so right, they call to you.
You feel that little corner,
that gentle fold in the land,
is welcoming you.

So I park my bike,
turn back a turf in the best place
to light a little fire and smile
when I find cold ashes
and burnt sticks tucked away.

In the morning, fed and watered,
I douse my fire, replace the turf,
and ride away.  Knowing one day,
someone else with good instincts,
will roll back the turf and smile.

Gyppo
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Re: Good Instincts
« Reply #1 on: July 18, 2015, 07:11:20 PM »
I'm smiling now Gyppo, thanks to the image you painted.
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Offline Laura H

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Re: Good Instincts
« Reply #2 on: July 18, 2015, 07:17:34 PM »
Good instincts, indeed.
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Re: Good Instincts
« Reply #3 on: July 19, 2015, 05:57:22 AM »
I really like that, Gyppo. Sort of all part of life's circle.

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Re: Good Instincts
« Reply #4 on: July 19, 2015, 06:36:34 AM »
I Like that   :)

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Re: Good Instincts
« Reply #5 on: July 19, 2015, 08:21:29 AM »
Well brushed, Gyppo. Do I see John on a solo bike trip before he met Frances?  :o  The characters show up everywhere.

The imagery had a Steinbeck feel to it, for me. The sense of place painted with words and phrases like camp, fold of land and douse the fire reminded me Of Mice and Men.

I enjoyed it. Thanks for posting.

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Offline Mark T

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Re: Good Instincts
« Reply #6 on: July 19, 2015, 02:57:59 PM »

Simply sketched, enjoyable to look at piece. Smooth tense transition post-S1 brings the memory alive. Good job.