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Offline Dylan di Vilde

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Swimming in Greece
« on: June 05, 2015, 08:57:21 AM »


I swam a long way,
to float in the bay
just me
adrift in the sea
surrounded by fabulous scenery,
a backdrop of mountainous greenery
and a noble monastery perched atop
a towering rocky outcrop.
Fabulous shades of incredible blue.
Such picture perfect days are few.

Theres nowhere else Id rather be
than floating here in this warmish sea
except maybe, rather than float,
Id be that guy there on the luxury boat
whos dropped anchor for the day
to lounge on his deck in the azure bay.

This is where his life has led
now silver haired and lobster red, 
he is handed a vodka Martini
by a girl in a skimpy bikini,
shes athletic and slim.
Yeah Id like to be him.
For although he is fat and unhealthy,
hes undoubtedly stupidly wealthy.
I could happily be a smug wanker
leisurely bobbing at anchor.

But then would I swap what Ive got
for a yacht?
Would that be enough?
- a boat and a fit bit of fluff?


And anyway
on reflection Id say
his boat and his totty depends
on him having the wrong sort of friends.
Something about him says Crook
so one day hell run out of luck.
Dont bet on his long term survival
hell be shot by a cold-blooded rival.
And perhaps hell think back to this day
as his life blood is oozing away.
Hell notice the girl is uninjured and yet
how coolly she draws on a slim cigarette.
On that day hell wish he was me -
that bloke swimming free in the sea.
Then a final close shot to the head.
Theyll want to make sure hes quite dead.


I strike for home and ponder
the vistas spreading yonder.
Do monks ever fall
from that monastery wall?
Stumbling off the seaward side
or lonely tragic suicide.
Was a boat ever sunk
by a plummeting monk?

Paltry worries of this kind
embrace my calm, untroubled mind
For me no bitter payback looms,
no killers lurk in darkened rooms,
Theres just me in my trunks,
a negligible chance of falling monks,
a picturesque bay,
a perfect day
and perfect peace
in Greece.

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Offline Mrs N

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Re: Swimming in Greece
« Reply #1 on: June 05, 2015, 10:25:15 AM »
 ;D ;D ;D

I love the way your mind works. The rich, unhealthy bloke, wanting to be you, had me grinning.  
« Last Edit: June 06, 2015, 05:47:14 PM by Mrs N »

Offline Jennie

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Re: Swimming in Greece
« Reply #2 on: June 07, 2015, 09:08:29 AM »
This was so enjoyable. Reminds me of something I read once, don't remember where. You can have things or you can have freedom. Unless you make a deliberate decision, you will wind up with things.

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Re: Swimming in Greece
« Reply #3 on: June 07, 2015, 11:48:12 AM »
I'm wholly ignorant when it comes to poetry, but I liked this a great deal.  Well done!

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Re: Swimming in Greece
« Reply #4 on: June 07, 2015, 01:42:46 PM »
Very good. Love this:

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I could happily be a smug wanker
leisurely bobbing at anchor.
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Re: Swimming in Greece
« Reply #5 on: June 07, 2015, 02:52:45 PM »
As always, both highly entertaining and thought provoking.

I must admit I really liked the thought of boat being sunk by a plummeting monk.
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Re: Swimming in Greece
« Reply #6 on: June 17, 2015, 01:30:35 PM »

Wonderfully entertaining.

Offline Louis D. Thorpe

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Re: Swimming in Greece
« Reply #7 on: July 25, 2015, 11:48:52 PM »
very creative and entertaining.

Made me think of swimming in Crete in 1980 -minus all the dramatic evocations.

I was awe-struck by the beauty...