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Offline Clarius

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A killing for Sister George ;) - censored by FutureLearn
« on: April 30, 2015, 08:09:44 AM »
Apparently this breached their guidelines.

        "Can you spare a shilling’ for an old altar-boy, Sister?”

        His voice was a soft lilting brogue but his hand clasped firm about her ankle. She looked down at him, lying huddled along the wall. She’d thought him a pile of old rags, something left out for the dust cart. A face peeked out from beneath: weather-beaten and world-weary, the face of a martyr. Smells like he shat himself.

         She raised the skirts of her habit, as though to kneel down beside him. His rheumy eyes ranged along the length of thigh, finding the sweet spot of bare flesh between garter and drawer.

         “Ah, now, Sister – “

        She drew back her foot, square toed brogue solid as a house brick, and kicked him full in the face, as a quarterback might punt at a football. The nape of his grimy matted head bounced against cinderblock, sounding like a watermelon dropped onto a concrete floor. Beneath the filthy blanket his leg twitched: once, twice, and then stilled.

         Sister George’s hand found its way between her thighs: squeezing and working there, panting and sighing until –  she threw back her head and howled her act of contrition at the waning moon.

         “Father!”
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Re: A killing for Sister George ;) - censored by FutureLearn
« Reply #1 on: April 30, 2015, 08:24:59 AM »
I've dabbled in censored works myself. I refuse to let that freedom go, so well done for not just throwing away.

I had thought this was an exercise on similies at first.

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Re: A killing for Sister George ;) - censored by FutureLearn
« Reply #2 on: April 30, 2015, 08:25:52 AM »
Yeah, three at a rough count. Hmm. Never noticed.
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Re: A killing for Sister George ;) - censored by FutureLearn
« Reply #3 on: April 30, 2015, 08:27:10 AM »
It's a tailored market, that censored stuff.

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Re: A killing for Sister George ;) - censored by FutureLearn
« Reply #4 on: April 30, 2015, 08:30:38 AM »
Yet Stephen King's Mr Mercedes has a guy in bed with his mother getting a little 'light relief'.
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Re: A killing for Sister George ;) - censored by FutureLearn
« Reply #5 on: April 30, 2015, 09:35:04 AM »
King is King :)

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Re: A killing for Sister George ;) - censored by FutureLearn
« Reply #6 on: April 30, 2015, 05:16:05 PM »
Was FutureLearn your intended audience? Most likely not. I hate censorship in a learning environment, although I do think this piece was designed to shock rather than develop story or character.

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Re: A killing for Sister George ;) - censored by FutureLearn
« Reply #7 on: May 01, 2015, 11:52:20 AM »
Yeah, it was a free-write, although not to shock, it just happened to. I considered having the antagonist be a man in drag, but I thinks there's a marked lack of female antagonist's, and that's before you get into transgender etc. It's almost like we're too politically correct, too afraid to cast these 'minorities' in a negative light.
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Re: A killing for Sister George ;) - censored by FutureLearn
« Reply #8 on: May 02, 2015, 08:16:39 AM »
Yup, tricky subjects are harder to breach.

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Re: A killing for Sister George ;) - censored by FutureLearn
« Reply #9 on: May 02, 2015, 08:38:39 AM »
I had a scifi short rejected by Jupiter because the two Chinese (M & F) astronauts finished their onboard altercation by having sex. Another pubisher rejected it, having liked the sex, but because they were Chinese and he couldn't stomach the concept that in, say, a hundred years the Chinese might have more spaceflights than the west.
The story, Target Practice, was published eventually by Encounters Magazine Issue #10 free to download
http://www.blackmatrixpub.com/documents/Encounters%2010.pdf

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Re: A killing for Sister George ;) - censored by FutureLearn
« Reply #10 on: May 02, 2015, 09:26:22 AM »
Well done for not trading in, geoffnelder.

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Re: A killing for Sister George ;) - censored by FutureLearn
« Reply #11 on: May 02, 2015, 04:30:44 PM »
You're that Geoff Nelder? How many published authors are there on here?
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Re: A killing for Sister George ;) - censored by FutureLearn
« Reply #12 on: May 02, 2015, 04:48:01 PM »
Well, I'm definitely this Geoff Nelder last time I looked.

Anyone can be a published author these days. I've been fortunate to grab the attention of a few tiny press that's all.

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Re: A killing for Sister George ;) - censored by FutureLearn
« Reply #13 on: May 02, 2015, 06:01:11 PM »
You're that Geoff Nelder? How many published authors are there on here?

Several.  Some more currently active than others.
My website is currently having a holiday, but will return like the $6,000,000 man.  Bigger, stronger, etc.

In the meantime, why not take pity on a starving author and visit my book sales page at http://stores.lulu.com/gyppo1