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Offline JosieW

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Clickety Clack
« on: March 20, 2015, 11:03:26 AM »
A poem for younger children and written for my four year old grandson:

Clickety Clack

A train leaves the station, clickety clack,
With wheels that chatter along the track.
     Its billowing smoke discolours the sky
     And hedges tremble as it clatters by.

Over the points with a clickety clack -
A mighty monster, strong and black.
     The fireman bends to shovel the coal
     As with clickety clack the coaches roll.

Itís gathering speed now, clickety clack,
The horses run and the ducklings quack.
     The cows in the fields gawk with surprise,
     Amazed at this beast of incredible size.

Past houses, villages, fields and trees,
Its powerful body travels with ease.
     It transports its passengers, clickety clack;
     Then rumbles and grumbles all the way back



Offline Clarius

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Re: Clickety Clack
« Reply #1 on: March 20, 2015, 04:49:38 PM »
I watched The Music Man on DVD recently. There's a song at the start performed aboard and set to the rhythm of a train. You might find it interesting in context of this piece.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JZ9U4Cbb4wg
O wad some Pow'r the giftie gie us
To see oursels as others see us

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Re: Clickety Clack
« Reply #2 on: March 20, 2015, 05:52:47 PM »
Hello:  Yes, I think I could well be interested.  I'll look tomorrow.  Thanks.

Offline Tom 10

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Re: Clickety Clack
« Reply #3 on: March 20, 2015, 06:29:17 PM »
What a delightful poem!

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Re: Clickety Clack
« Reply #4 on: March 20, 2015, 06:51:46 PM »
I'm sure my girls would have loved it when they were that age.  Both to read, and to have read to them.  It rolls along nicely, which is important to youngsters.

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Re: Clickety Clack
« Reply #5 on: March 20, 2015, 08:22:24 PM »
Did I mention I rather liked it.
O wad some Pow'r the giftie gie us
To see oursels as others see us

 - Robert Burns

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Re: Clickety Clack
« Reply #6 on: March 20, 2015, 09:03:50 PM »
Nice read.

Welcome to the site. :)

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Re: Clickety Clack
« Reply #7 on: March 21, 2015, 04:42:01 AM »
Thank you for our kind comments.  I have tried to bring the sound of the train into the words because the steam trains used to sing "diddledy-dee diddledy-dee" as they went along, and many of us children annoyed our parents by singing it too.  (In the olden days, ha ha)

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Re: Clickety Clack
« Reply #8 on: March 21, 2015, 04:47:00 AM »
Clarius, I've just watched the part of the film you mentioned and the sound within the song is: dum di dum dum; dum di dum dum.  You must try to write some train words to this rhythm.  It's fun. I'll stick with diddledy-dee - the English steam train.