Shock

[bailish]

I used to think about the way the sunshine glistened through your hair, that first weekend I met you on the beach, how you pouted when I kicked sand onto your face, but just as quickly smiled at my apology. Little did I know we would marry before the year was out.
But that memory was replaced yesterday when I barged into a motel room and bashed my best friend's brains all over your naked body, the
blood-covered crowbar in my white knuckles.

[rosez]

Hi bailish,
Yes this is a real shock indeed.
The first S is so romantic n tender ..dreamy lover fascinated by everything related his lover...that the contrast it creates while reading the second is enormous.
Very nice. ~rosez~

[bailish]

Thanks, rosez. I want people to go away with a vivid picture in their mind, and I wanted it to be as brief as possible. Thanks for reading and commenting.

[Gemwrites]

What a brilliant piece. Does exactly what it says on the tin.  Love the whole concept and yes, I was very shocked 

[bailish]

Thanks, Gemwrites. Hadn't looked at this one for a while.

[Mastafrank]

holy crap

shocking indeed,well written

[bailish]

Thanks, Mastafrank.

[Mastafrank]

I'll be sure to give you your space

[bailish]

Not necessary. Just don't sleep with my wife. 

[Mastafrank]

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[Alita Patel]

Hi there,
Seems like "shock" is the word of the day.  Great job!