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Re: Poetry exercise, anyone?
« Reply #45 on: May 12, 2014, 08:50:29 AM »
Nastier!!!  :D

I would certainly hope so.  ;D

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Re: Poetry exercise, anyone?
« Reply #46 on: May 12, 2014, 01:20:03 PM »
I like the idea. To catch the spirit of your idea though, it's almost like we need two groups of reviewers. The second set should not be able to see the original, or the reviews, just the revision. I have no idea how we'd work out the logistics. But your insight is an important one and I'd love to see it tested if we can.
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Re: Poetry exercise, anyone?
« Reply #47 on: May 12, 2014, 01:23:46 PM »

You are right. maybe there's way with PMs and a little panel or something but that calls for more enthusiasm than the response so far indicates. In general, we poets are very sluggardly with stuff like this but no worries, let's put our thinking caps on until tomorrow. I've got a business writing job to do anyway and am fart-arsing about here to avoid getting started. 

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« Reply #48 on: May 12, 2014, 02:27:32 PM »
We were derailed... and I'm one of guilty parties. Back to today's challenge:

Today's challenge is simple. I want limericks, but I want them sad, somber, and heavy. Irony is likely the shortest route and cheapest, so it'll count against you.
"Poetry is not speech raised to the level of music, but music brought down to the level of speech." - Paul Valery

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« Reply #49 on: May 12, 2014, 03:48:27 PM »

Well, I've drafted the business agreement so a little limerick sounds doable. Any particular form?

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« Reply #50 on: May 12, 2014, 04:03:46 PM »


Is this heavy enough?

Nothing less than the end of man
The culmination of an evil plan
In a thousand devilish ways
Here comes the end of days
Unless individuals say, I can. 

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Re: Poetry exercise, anyone?
« Reply #51 on: May 12, 2014, 04:54:30 PM »
Pretty grim.

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« Reply #52 on: May 13, 2014, 07:09:20 AM »
This one goes to Mark. While everyone's was bad in a good sort of way. Mark's piece actually defeats or at least deflates the natural playful sound of the form. Honorable mention to Nel for pure brutality :P
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« Reply #53 on: May 13, 2014, 08:03:58 AM »

Shoot. Alright, next go-around. Follow this rhyme and stanza scheme. Theme: Whatever. 

a
b
c
d

a
b
c
d

e
e
« Last Edit: May 13, 2014, 02:04:20 PM by Mark T »

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« Reply #54 on: May 13, 2014, 09:11:24 AM »
will meditate. Usual deadline?
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« Reply #55 on: May 13, 2014, 10:53:02 AM »

yah, roughly 24 hours from setting of the exercise, teach.  ;)

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« Reply #56 on: May 13, 2014, 02:45:51 PM »
The man's a nutter for setting a test,
specially for people who don't need any rest.
I really want to cry
but instead I'll try
caving his head in with an arm rest (sorry. I missed the dead-line for the lims)

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Re: Poetry exercise, anyone?
« Reply #57 on: May 13, 2014, 02:52:05 PM »
he gives
sin
more
space

she lives
in
your
place

badder
sadder

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« Reply #58 on: May 13, 2014, 02:52:43 PM »
Hey Bri, nutter yeah but more for creating my own mini-monster here, at least when you get to set the exercise you get a pass - let's hope some poetry fiend like eastwig doesn't get into power here and start setting devilishly difficult exercises...

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« Reply #59 on: May 13, 2014, 02:53:48 PM »
I like it, I like it, bit wordy tho' innit?

he gives
sin
more
space

she lives
in
your
place

badder
sadder