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Re: Poetry exercise, anyone?
« Reply #15 on: May 09, 2014, 05:19:21 PM »
 :D :D :D :D :D

Means had more fun waiting for yours to arrive. :)

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Re: Poetry exercise, anyone?
« Reply #16 on: May 09, 2014, 06:07:49 PM »
Brilliant.

A 14 line Alexandrine-esque creation. :o

The Ould Pub

Ingrained, nicotine-stained, wrapped around the rafters
years of smoke curled and crept, redolent with laughter
and sorrows often felt, by those inside the bar,
pervading everything, as folk enjoyed a jar

among fellow strangers, or hidden in the snugs
avoiding prying eyes, discreet, illicit hugs
exchanged clandestinely, behind the wooden screen
where lovers go to meet, a welcome change of scene.

A confessional where souls pour out their troubles
even more when drinking, especially the doubles
a happy hour special, ensures that profits soar;
singing in Mc Kendryís, letís make those rafters roar.

But stagger from the ancient dream, draw in fresh air,
a look reveals itís Wetherspoonís, oh, such despair.


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Re: Poetry exercise, anyone?
« Reply #17 on: May 09, 2014, 06:24:06 PM »
lullaby

the sheets are clean
the pillows fluffed
and night's song
fills my ears

curled up
on the blankets
a little kitten
purrs

candles
burning low
spread their
sweet scent

but relentless pain
prevents sleep

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Re: Poetry exercise, anyone?
« Reply #18 on: May 09, 2014, 06:40:28 PM »

Eish! It was a damn lullaby until the couplet finale jarred me off my dozy perch. Sounded like an insomniac's paradise up until then. Good work, african sorry about the pain. Do i really have to do a poem here with this kind of competition and with CP looking relentless too - plus Sio stamped foursquare at the top?

What I also have appreciated with your recent posts Nel, is the soft capped unpunctuated style, it's a difficult writing method in the sense of precise communication but that very imprecision allows for boundary constructs in the readership's imagination.
Thanks, I borrowed it for the middle stanza of Aurora. 

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Re: Poetry exercise, anyone?
« Reply #19 on: May 09, 2014, 06:47:31 PM »
Thanks Mark.

And I noticed. It gets easier with practice.

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« Reply #20 on: May 09, 2014, 07:47:46 PM »

Thanx. Hey all, right now on the board there's one of those funny juxtapositions where two titles go together:

It says:

Fragile
Ego

The cool part is that they're both actually by the same member. Far out Ian, on purpose or just a bummer?



 

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Re: Poetry exercise, anyone?
« Reply #21 on: May 10, 2014, 09:00:23 AM »
Bears

Fifty bears sitting on chairs
at a wedding in a circus ring
is quite a sight to see
for free

And a waltzing bear
is beyond compare
see them gnaw
with tooth and claw
watch them drink
swallow and sink

But about the cleaning
you must be dreaming
if you think Iíll stay
to shovel anything away.


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Re: Poetry exercise, anyone?
« Reply #22 on: May 10, 2014, 10:09:43 AM »
Wow!



All entries comply and all are great.  Need a bit of time to decide the winner.

In the meantime there is still a bit of time for some last minute submission....  Suspense suspense!

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Re: Poetry exercise, anyone?
« Reply #23 on: May 10, 2014, 03:04:21 PM »
Ok. Time's up and it's also up to me to figure out who won.


Dancing Bears by Mark,
    sincerely made me smile
And Nellie touched my heart
    with her un-lullaby,

I hope CP will get his gifts
    next time St. Nick comes into town
Although I wonder how he could miss
    With tracking numbers written down

All in all I had a ball
   you played along with me
To fourteen liners, one and all
   Maintained their poems to be

But now I must decide and damn!
The winner's Lady 510bhan!
    


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Re: Poetry exercise, anyone?
« Reply #24 on: May 10, 2014, 03:09:13 PM »
Whoo-hoo! ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D

Okay . . . NEW CHALLENGE, just to be perverse,  ??? I want rhymes to occur in the first word of lines. You choose the pattern, no longer than 12 lines. Haven't a clue how this will work out -- never done it myself. ;D

Have fun. :o

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Re: Poetry exercise, anyone?
« Reply #25 on: May 10, 2014, 05:56:40 PM »
Time is a lie told by the dying
rhyme is a trick that continues the lying
act upon act upon act is elected
stacked in a way that the next is expected




[you didn't say I couldn't rhyme both ends]
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"Poetry is not speech raised to the level of music, but music brought down to the level of speech." - Paul Valery

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Re: Poetry exercise, anyone?
« Reply #26 on: May 10, 2014, 05:59:38 PM »
you didn't say I couldn't rhyme both ends

No need for anyone else to enter. You already won, I'm sure.

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Re: Poetry exercise, anyone?
« Reply #27 on: May 10, 2014, 06:07:09 PM »
Cool! 8) Who's next up to meet the challenge? ;D

Time is a fiction told by the dying
rhyme is a trick that continues the lying
act upon act upon act is elected
stacked in a way that the next is expected




[you didn't say I couldn't rhyme both ends]

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Re: Poetry exercise, anyone?
« Reply #28 on: May 10, 2014, 06:08:52 PM »
I snuck in an edit.

shhhhhhhhh
"Poetry is not speech raised to the level of music, but music brought down to the level of speech." - Paul Valery

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Re: Poetry exercise, anyone?
« Reply #29 on: May 10, 2014, 06:13:51 PM »
Snuck-in edits are fine by me. ;D