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Offline CorneliusPoe

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All In
« on: September 12, 2014, 10:50:10 PM »
I tripped and tipped
my cards too quickly,
well before the call.
No draw, no bluff,
no cuffed-card option,
two plays remain
and I won't fold.
"Poetry is not speech raised to the level of music, but music brought down to the level of speech." - Paul Valery

Offline 510bhan

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Re: All In
« Reply #1 on: September 12, 2014, 10:58:15 PM »
Maybe you'll win. ::) Word choices reflect the topic well and the position of the N as a gambler who won't give in but will risk all, a hint at recklessness rather than level-headed and calculated judgement.

Nice sounds in this Marc. ;)

Offline CorneliusPoe

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Re: All In
« Reply #2 on: September 12, 2014, 11:01:46 PM »
thanks Sio. :)
"Poetry is not speech raised to the level of music, but music brought down to the level of speech." - Paul Valery

Offline Mark T

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Re: All In
« Reply #3 on: September 13, 2014, 06:56:01 AM »

Nice work, marcus ... if i may...?

So I tripped and tipped
my cards too quickly,
well before the call.
No draw, no bluff,
no cuff-card ploy,
two plays remain
and I won't fold.

Offline CorneliusPoe

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Re: All In
« Reply #4 on: September 13, 2014, 07:30:45 AM »
No, you may not. Stay on your side of the table and keep your hands where I can see them. [insert poker face smiley here]





Morning, Man -  Thanks
"Poetry is not speech raised to the level of music, but music brought down to the level of speech." - Paul Valery

Offline Mark T

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Re: All In
« Reply #5 on: September 13, 2014, 07:37:30 AM »

 ;D  < Can you see my hands now?

Offline CorneliusPoe

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Re: All In
« Reply #6 on: September 13, 2014, 07:54:55 AM »
No, but looking at my avatar, I assume that they are trembling in fear :)

Have a good one, Mark.

Driving the kids up to Zoo. Maybe the beautiful sight of animals torn from their natural habitats and thrown into cages for my amusement will inspire me to write a real poem :P
"Poetry is not speech raised to the level of music, but music brought down to the level of speech." - Paul Valery

Offline Tom 10

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Re: All In
« Reply #7 on: September 13, 2014, 10:47:23 AM »
I'm not sure how the cadence works, but it certainly does.   Nice description of of N.'s position. 8)
I like this poem.

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Re: All In
« Reply #8 on: September 13, 2014, 12:21:43 PM »
Driving the kids up to Zoo. Maybe the beautiful sight of animals torn from their natural habitats and thrown into cages for my amusement will inspire me to write a real poem :P

I like the way you think. Er, shouldn't that be... driving the ducklings...?