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Offline CorneliusPoe

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Poem: Nothing (shameless use of clichés)
« on: March 24, 2014, 10:52:08 PM »
Offered in keeping with my current (and not so new) bout with nihilism and in continuing deference to everyone's love of formal verse :)

(first appeared in “The Lyric”, Volume 73, No.1  - Winter 1993)

Poor me, we cry, then wash our hands;
this world of ours makes such demands
and no one knows just where we stand
and so we stand for nothing.

For now we hold, as science shows:
that nothing is and no one knows.
Our course is cast upon the flows
of, from, and back to nothing.

We build our castles by the sea
and conscious of the irony,
ignore the tides of destiny
as if we thought them nothing.

- me
"Poetry is not speech raised to the level of music, but music brought down to the level of speech." - Paul Valery

Offline bri h

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Re: Poem: Nothing (shameless use of clichés)
« Reply #1 on: March 25, 2014, 08:50:54 PM »
Ooh, love the rhythm of this. And the rhymes? They 'flow,' and don't seem forced. I like that, and aspire to it. Great poem, mate. B
Fare thee well Skip. We're all 'Keening' now. xbx

Offline Mrs N

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Re: Poem: Nothing (shameless use of clichés)
« Reply #2 on: March 26, 2014, 05:36:20 AM »
I really like this, but it is a bit bleak, espec the first verse. Please let there be more than nothing.

You've certainly offered food for thought (cliche to match your own!!  :D). But that's the sign of good writing.