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Re: Soot and Smog. wip. Re-write @ #23, again at #35. Again @ 43
« Reply #45 on: February 20, 2014, 12:15:51 PM »
I can't believe how much you worked on this. This goes in your book, you know.

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Re: Soot and Smog. wip. Re-write @ #23, again at #35. Again @ 43
« Reply #46 on: February 20, 2014, 01:37:48 PM »
What book?
I'm enjoying the wonderful suggy's that I get, it adds to the experience. Very inspirational. Thanks Toop.
And you too, Bob. I'll never be in your 'strap-hanging-league,' but I'm getting there.

Do the last two verses make it? Or were they too much? Bri.
Fare thee well Skip. We're all 'Keening' now. xbx

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Re: Soot and Smog. wip. Re-write @ #23, again at #35. Again @ 43
« Reply #47 on: February 20, 2014, 01:51:00 PM »
Yes, Bri. I will make a 'straphanger' out of you, even if it kills you !    LOL   ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D:

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Re: Soot and Smog. wip. Re-write @ #23, again at #35. Again @ 43
« Reply #48 on: February 20, 2014, 01:51:53 PM »
I think the last two verses are okay mate.

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Re: Soot and Smog. wip. Re-write @ #23, again at #35. Again @ 43
« Reply #49 on: February 20, 2014, 02:06:18 PM »
Yes, Bri. I will make a 'straphanger' out of you, even if it kills you !    LOL   ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D:

Ha ha. Good one, Bob. Cheers. Glad you're enjoying this.
Fare thee well Skip. We're all 'Keening' now. xbx

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Re: Soot and Smog. wip. Re-write @ #23, again at #35. Again @ 43
« Reply #50 on: February 20, 2014, 03:57:13 PM »
The book with all the stories you have floating around your head!
(You have to imagine my shouting that)

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Re: Soot and Smog. wip. Re-write @ #23, again at #35. Again @ 43
« Reply #51 on: February 20, 2014, 04:55:03 PM »
The book with all the stories you have floating around your head!
(You have to imagine my shouting that)

"Aww righ,' Am with ya noo. Ah thort youh were on aboot summink else?"
(translation) "Ah, I see, now. I thought you were on about something else."  ;D
Fare thee well Skip. We're all 'Keening' now. xbx

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« Reply #52 on: February 21, 2014, 06:14:08 PM »
Would another verse or two, make this over-long? Or should I just leave it 'as-is?' Bri.
Fare thee well Skip. We're all 'Keening' now. xbx