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Winner Flash Fiction #77
« on: January 09, 2014, 04:24:55 PM »
Flash Fiction #77 :D

300-500 words

Anything you like but the story must contain these words exactly  (but in any order) : help, factor, compromise.

Entries to me by PM by midnight January 16th 2014.

Have fun -- this is an easy one. ;D
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Re: Flash Fiction #77
« Reply #1 on: January 13, 2014, 03:17:55 PM »
Got the first one -- thank you. :D

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Re: Flash Fiction #77
« Reply #2 on: January 16, 2014, 01:28:06 PM »
Not long left . . . no other takers and the single entry will win by default. ::)

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Winner of Flash Fiction #77
« Reply #3 on: January 16, 2014, 08:24:40 PM »
And the winner is -- TheDude. ;) Sorry nobody competed with you, but hey, that's how it turns out sometimes. Here it is for your enjoyment, folks -- no vote required. ::)


ARGUMENT

“If you want the best outcome, you have to deal.”

“What’s a deal? Where do you compromise on life versus death? Part dead? Half alive?”

“You need my help. You killed a police officer. That is one of the elements that allow them to ask for the death penalty. And it’s not life versus death. It’s freedom versus death. Being locked up for life isn’t the same as being alive.”

“Not guilty by reason of self defense is what I want. He was trying to kill me.”

“I know that’s what you say. Is there any other evidence, something you are keeping back for a surprise?”

“No. He came to me in bed and said he was going to strangle me.”

“But you were lovers; he was often in your bed. He never strangled you before. How about claiming it was accidental, that you were startled and fired without thinking?”

“Who accidentally puts six holes in somebody? No, it’s self defense, something allowed in all civilized societies as justification for killing.”

“But you haven’t presented any evidence of that, not one factor that would indicate you fired while in fear for your life or of sustaining grave bodily harm. Will you accept voluntary manslaughter?”

“No. I killed him because he threatened to kill me. That’s all.”

“You had your pistol under your pillow. Is that how you always met your lover?”

“Yes. And what does that matter? How I choose to defend myself is my business.”

“What matters is that the normal citizen, the jury member, does not sleep with policemen, does not kill them. They cannot fathom being you, so they go along when the state tells them you are a monster that must be put down.”

“Are you my lawyer or not? Do as I say or I will get somebody that will. Here it is: no plea bargain, no deals. It was self-defense. I’ll roll the dice that they will believe me.”

“As you wish.”

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Re: Winner Flash Fiction #77
« Reply #4 on: January 16, 2014, 08:31:30 PM »
Well done Dude. Great story. I enjoyed it. Bri.
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Re: Winner Flash Fiction #77
« Reply #5 on: January 16, 2014, 09:40:38 PM »
I was trying an all dialog piece. I am bad with dialog and this was a chance to try it out. I did not expect to win or be the only entry. But, it is a great honor anyway.
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Re: Winner Flash Fiction #77
« Reply #6 on: January 16, 2014, 09:44:00 PM »
Yep -- these challenges are always worthwhile for trying something new -- just getting down and 'doing it' rather than procrastinating and promising to write a piece that tests your skills.

Congratulations for trying something different and not dithering about it so that it met the submission deadline. Kudos to you. ;)

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Re: Winner Flash Fiction #77
« Reply #7 on: January 16, 2014, 09:51:39 PM »
Nice piece. I long like dialogue pieces and this was just fine. Good for you.

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Re: Winner Flash Fiction #77
« Reply #8 on: January 16, 2014, 11:49:38 PM »
Nice read, Dude, well done.

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Re: Winner Flash Fiction #77
« Reply #9 on: January 17, 2014, 02:20:01 AM »
Well done on a neat piece of writing and an experiment that worked.