Author Topic: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac  (Read 44702 times)

Offline Tom 10

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #60 on: January 12, 2014, 10:59:37 AM »
Agreed.

My thought for the second part - ". . . shaped us to fit as we do." ::) ::) 

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #61 on: January 12, 2014, 11:05:09 AM »
It's amazing how these short poems can say so much. Some give a snapshot, some tell a story, some advocate a philosophy . . . all good stuff. ;)

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #62 on: January 12, 2014, 11:09:58 AM »
He frowned as the wine went down, a grapes of wrath vintage, he suspected.

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #63 on: January 12, 2014, 11:21:37 AM »
Another bell-wringer, Sio!  You have an amazing proclivity for this.  You are definitely adding texture and unexpected meaning to some of these.  Just wonderful. 8)

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #64 on: January 12, 2014, 11:24:48 AM »
Thank you. :D

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #65 on: January 12, 2014, 03:31:46 PM »
She wants to keep her baby
yet unborn
the baby has more than she.


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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #66 on: January 13, 2014, 07:02:53 PM »
Lake freezes over, fury things living on the islands now run free.


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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #67 on: January 13, 2014, 07:19:48 PM »
fury ---> furry?

From leafy hides, we watch spoor-tracked, hide-bound, horned beasts twitch and bound downwind.

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #68 on: January 13, 2014, 07:23:00 PM »
 :-\ :) :-*

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #69 on: January 13, 2014, 07:28:21 PM »
Part of a poem I'm writing, on leaving the Pit forever. a wip, but relevant for this thread.


Plenty of height, my lungs are not tight, standing straight, but I'm not alright.


« Last Edit: January 13, 2014, 07:47:22 PM by brianh »
Fare thee well Skip. We're all 'Keening' now. xbx

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #70 on: January 14, 2014, 04:37:00 PM »
Tom  - what a great topic. Need to get my poetry head on ... this is a great kick up the arse to help creativity ...

What could be more simple than just  a poxy  seventeen syllables.

Bobby

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #71 on: January 14, 2014, 04:43:42 PM »
 ;D ;D ;D ;D Nice.

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #72 on: January 14, 2014, 04:44:00 PM »
Seventeen poxy syllables on a poxy page, and I love 'em.
Fare thee well Skip. We're all 'Keening' now. xbx

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #73 on: January 14, 2014, 04:45:01 PM »
 :D

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #74 on: January 14, 2014, 04:49:04 PM »
A pox on all you wannabees. Let's see your words in po-et-er-ree.

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Fare thee well Skip. We're all 'Keening' now. xbx