The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac

[indar]

sleet savaged the trees tore at the roof and tried to get in the window


rain fell in such long dense strands that the world turned many shades of silver.


petals dropping from unfamiliar trees, yearning for late winter snow

[510bhan]

2-4 more and you'll have The American Paragraph. Ask Tom about it.

[indar]

uh-----huh? Each was meant to be a seperate thing or am I not getting the gist of this?

[Tom 10]

Hi I,

Yes, I read each as individual AS's.  I love them, especially the second, although the sounds of the first one are pretty amazing.

Isn't it something to see what can be done with these?

Sio was referring to a suggestion to create a new form -- The American Paragraph,  a form originating with RMP/MWC, although some may think CPT-2 the more appropriate venue.

As envisioned, The American Paragraph is composed of 5-7 interrelated American Sentences.  The Wright Brothers are down at the beach now trying to get the first one off the ground.

[510bhan]

uh-----huh? Each was meant to be a seperate thing or am I not getting the gist of this?

You're not quick enough tonight Linda . . . as Tom said, it was a suggestion I made and I reckon your three 'separate' AS lines work together well, so  . . . getting close to the proposed new form.

Tom -- you are a cheeky monkey!

[Tom 10]

The American Paragraph -- a great idea by Sio.

A real deal.  Still early though.  At this point it looks something like this:

[510bhan]

 

Come fly with me, let's pretend we're birds with dreams, unfettered, uplifted.
I'll give you talons to protect yourself, we'll take the Jet Stream thermals.
Dense clouds of pillow mist offer secrets whispered soft to us alone.
As we soar higher, the small things crawling below will give perspective.
Our achievements hover on the brink of imagination's promise.

[Tom 10]

Hats off, Sio, the first American Paragraph, you’ve just penned it!
A moment of silence to honor the occasion, let us take note.
I’ll tell my grandchildren’s grandchildren - I was here, at the beginning.
And you, merrily Murieling in Ballymena, on a break,
with your headless Chinaman letting you do the talking for you both.

[510bhan]

The alternative ventriloquist, his silence keeps his secrets safe.
No talkative Chinaman this, a headless corpse . . . cat might have his tongue.
Trawled from the sea, in bits and pieces, a jigsaw for the coroner.
Detective Sloane, on the case, recognises 'death by a hundred swords'.
The dummy's identity will be revealed, of that you can be sure.

[bri h]

Dammit you two. My fingers are aching with all the counting I've done.

Easy-peasy-and,
lemon-squeezy,
words are coming, easier now.

 

[Tom 10]

Sio!

Absolutely delightful! 

You have the perfect feel for the AS and now the ability to hatch the American Paragraph!!

I am in awe.

I will not attempt to respond in kind, however. 
My offering I worried would flip this to look like a CPT, and then my fear that this too will be stolen.

[510bhan]

I really should be Murieling and plotting and scheming -- later.

[Tom 10]

All three?

I will be trying in the next few weeks to do a decent American Paragraph.  Your idea is golden.

[bri h]

The beach hears my confession. Twice a day, my sins are washed away.

[510bhan]

The bitch takes my confession. Twice a day, she washes my sins away.