Author Topic: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac  (Read 28745 times)

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #15 on: January 09, 2014, 04:38:19 PM »
Trodden in galoshes, leaf splash sploshes above boot tops in winter.

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #16 on: January 09, 2014, 04:41:30 PM »
Excellent sounds, Sio, no surprise 8)

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Beyond what geese form each fall, a remake of the world on the move.

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #17 on: January 09, 2014, 04:51:34 PM »
A spearhead splits gilded clouds as sun and geese make speed for home tonight.

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #18 on: January 09, 2014, 04:56:18 PM »
Best yet, I think.  Cogent, nice hinge to it, two aha's!  Very nice. 8)
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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #19 on: January 09, 2014, 04:58:35 PM »
Hey -- I like bullshit. :(

Her diamond necklace chokes the word whispered over vocal chords  -- mercy.

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #20 on: January 09, 2014, 05:09:00 PM »
Interesting one. :)

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #21 on: January 09, 2014, 05:12:29 PM »
Charred or scarred the skin glistens red, proud it stands, itching for revenge.

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #22 on: January 09, 2014, 05:28:19 PM »
Great stuff. Thanks for the links, Tom.
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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #23 on: January 09, 2014, 05:41:47 PM »
Are you kidding Chizzy?  Sio's putting on the clinic! 8)

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #24 on: January 09, 2014, 05:43:37 PM »
Reckon you got the name wrong for these . . . it's surely Ulster banter, albeit limited to 17

syllables but hey. ;D

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #25 on: January 09, 2014, 05:48:50 PM »
The ice expands from both banks and chokes the river.

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #26 on: January 09, 2014, 05:54:16 PM »
Welcome back Ms52,  nice one! :)

Sio, you keep this up and you name the genre whatever suits you, your keyboard is shooting flames! :)

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #27 on: January 09, 2014, 05:55:06 PM »

A leaf pushes down on the updraft and lightens the heft of its tree.

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #28 on: January 09, 2014, 06:05:10 PM »
Really like those last two -- Heidi and Tom, I could 'feel' them, nice and rustic, strong sense of nature. ;)

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Re: The American Sentence / American Haiku / Kerouac
« Reply #29 on: January 09, 2014, 06:08:28 PM »
Thanks Sio, this one's my fave posted so far:

A spearhead splits gilded clouds as sun and geese make speed for home tonight