Routine

[510bhan]

Mundane, routine, life
scored on paper
with dots and quavers,
sheet music waiting for
a conductor and orchestra
to introduce all those Italian terms
that end in ‘o’

and when the end comes,
oh, the understanding
from listening to the rhythm and  flow
makes sense
too late
it’s time to go.
Death is never routine
it only happens once.

[bri h]

Succinct. To the point. A new way of saying, 'We live, we die.' Well done chuck. xbx

[510bhan]

Thanks Bri' . . . and you can imagine all the appropriate Italian 'o' terms that apply to you.

Kind of like -- we listen to music and are moved by it, but don't fully understand or appreciate it until the piece had ended/is over.

[bri h]

The abyss we feel when the concert is over. The empty space between the music and the rest of the day. I feel it exactly. xbx

[Pale Writer]

I like this too, Sio. 

I wasn't sure if the last two lines helped much in S2. The first part of that stanza said as much.

[510bhan]

Cheers Pale -- guess I had my sledgehammer at the keyboard with me.

[shadowdrifter]

I like the metaphor of music and especially the duality of score.  Don't think my Italian is up to all the O words but I think the poem would have great impact if you ended on the O of Go, kind of seems an apt finale.

[510bhan]

Good thinks, shadowdrifter, hadn't considered that. Thank you.

[Louis D. Thorpe]

I like the metaphor of music and especially the duality of score.  Don't think my Italian is up to all the O words but I think the poem would have great impact if you ended on the O of Go, kind of seems an apt finale.

I agree. Enough said.

[510bhan]

Thanks, Mat  Avec slash below.

Mundane, routine, life
scored on paper
with dots and quavers,
sheet music waiting for
a conductor and orchestra
to introduce all those Italian terms
that end in ‘o’

and when the end comes,
oh, the understanding
from listening to the rhythm and flow
makes sense
too late,
it’s time to go.

[Dylan di Vilde]

Siobhan,
I like the concept here but I think you’re missing a trick by not including some appropriate musical terms; Presto, Con spirito, Adagio, instead of ‘those Italian terms that end in ‘o’’

They all have a suitably poetic ring.

And then end with a final Rallentando or Diminuendo ?

Just a thought