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Offline bri h

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Re: More Tool of the Trade / part two (780)
« Reply #30 on: November 30, 2013, 01:58:20 PM »
And 'riverbank' is one word so I just repaired that as well.

Well that would depend on where you stash your money, wouldn't it. ha ha
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Re: More Tool of the Trade / part two (780)
« Reply #31 on: November 30, 2013, 01:59:56 PM »
 ;D ;D ;D

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Re: More Tool of the Trade / part two (780)
« Reply #32 on: November 30, 2013, 02:03:38 PM »
Yupper.

-- Three outlaws robbed the Lincoln county river bank last Thursday. They shot two tellers and a dog during their getaway. --  ;D

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Re: More Tool of the Trade / part two (780)
« Reply #33 on: November 30, 2013, 03:52:17 PM »
The dog's feline companion and best friend is relentlessly pursuing the robbers across the desert.

That's right.  The 'pussy' is in hot pursuit.


Sorry, couldn't resist.

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Re: More Tool of the Trade / part two (780)
« Reply #34 on: November 30, 2013, 03:54:31 PM »
 ;D I was going to try expanding on your joke but maybe I'd better just smile and leave it there.

 ;D ;D ;D

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Re: More Tool of the Trade / part two (780)
« Reply #35 on: November 30, 2013, 04:42:23 PM »
Innit amazing what you can start with an innocuous little sentence?  ;D

GOD I LOVE this site. The creativity is so refreshing.
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Re: More Tool of the Trade / part two (780)
« Reply #36 on: November 30, 2013, 04:44:32 PM »
 ;D me 2

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Re: More Tool of the Trade / part two (780)
« Reply #37 on: December 01, 2013, 11:09:30 PM »
I haven’t written any today while enjoying Bunny’s company and having her all to myself for once.

However, she finally ducked out to do some shopping this evening and I’ve been pondering the ‘Miss Abigail Reno’ character of this story.
While Jake discovering the girl bathing might tantalize male readers with this accidental intimacy, I’ve been trying to get into ‘Miss Abby’s’ head about the incident when everyone comes face to face for the first time.

1.   I figure she would have naturally been embarrassed – that’s a given.
2.   She doesn’t know the Jake character yet and might try to downplay or mask her reaction.
3.   She probably wouldn’t want her father or Mr. Owens to know what happened.
4.   She might try to size up the Jake character quickly while.

What I’d like to try is having Jake’s internal dialogue and him attempting to surmise what some of Miss Abby’s stern looks might mean. I’d also like to have the dialogue between the four characters be calm and even keel on the surface while Jake and Abby’s portion is laced with flirting on his part and veiled warnings on her part.

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Re: More Tool of the Trade / part two (780)
« Reply #38 on: December 02, 2013, 02:54:24 PM »
Do Jake and Abby 'do the deed' eventually? If so, you might want to put some flirty double meaning banter into the conversation. Yes?
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Re: More Tool of the Trade / part two (780)
« Reply #39 on: December 02, 2013, 03:30:13 PM »
Eventually I want them to get together but I'm trying for a rocky beginning and work through the angst and awkwardness of their first unofficial meeting. I've been working on it today. Trying to flit back and forth with politeness spoken while she stabs him with a poison eye if her father or Mr. Owens catch wind of this. Let me work it a bit more trying to clean it up so it read smooth and hopefully without words spelt backwards.  ;D 

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Re: More Tool of the Trade / part two (780)
« Reply #40 on: December 02, 2013, 09:04:44 PM »
Boy, that whole part sounds so great.

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Re: More Tool of the Trade / part two (780)
« Reply #41 on: December 02, 2013, 09:18:50 PM »
 ;D I'm working on it.

Right now it feels like something isn't quite right yet, with Miss Abby. It might be an old guy trying to think like a young girl. Ha  ;D ;D