I cut down those long sentences. Here's how that section reads now.
... After the major and Mr. Owens left, Jake pondered what he was going to do to hide who he was. Changing his last name was a start. Now he had to change his face. Two years ago a newspaper man printed a drawing of him with a caption that read, ‘Cloddell deals justice to the Salinger brothers.
With fifteen or so ranch hands wandering in and out of saloons, at least one of them had to have seen his picture. The Freemont gazette wasn’t a wanted poster but it managed to do the same thing.
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