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Pale Writer

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Human (a swear or two)
« on: October 27, 2013, 10:42:10 AM »
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Offline Laura H

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Re: Human (a swear or two)
« Reply #1 on: October 27, 2013, 11:04:22 AM »
I enjoyed this, Pale. Darn humans  ;D
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Re: Human (a swear or two)
« Reply #2 on: October 27, 2013, 11:12:34 AM »
Thanks Laura. Was meant for a flash challenge, but collected dust. Not worth submitting but there it was doing nothing. :)

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Re: Human (a swear or two)
« Reply #3 on: October 27, 2013, 02:57:11 PM »
Haha. That was fun. Wonder if the Men In Black would affect the whole thing.

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Re: Human (a swear or two)
« Reply #4 on: October 27, 2013, 03:12:57 PM »
:) thank you, 2par.

I needed something that worked with the bowels of the ship. :) (no coffee was drank during this episode :P )

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Re: Human (a swear or two)
« Reply #5 on: October 27, 2013, 03:20:59 PM »
"drank" = drunk
the first "their" should be the
"dissolved" should be dissolve

Little confusing in parts.
Clean up and enter it someplace. Great fun.

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Re: Human (a swear or two)
« Reply #6 on: October 27, 2013, 03:26:43 PM »
Nope. :)

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Re: Human (a swear or two)
« Reply #7 on: October 27, 2013, 03:27:59 PM »
cluck...cluck...squawk...

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Re: Human (a swear or two)
« Reply #8 on: October 27, 2013, 03:32:03 PM »
Confusing read K. But I got it eventually. I don't think there's anything wrong with the 'their.' But 'dissolved' is wrong. Maybe you should look at the wording that surrounds the word? Bri.
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Re: Human (a swear or two)
« Reply #9 on: October 27, 2013, 04:30:38 PM »
Thanks Bri.  Yup, that was me fiddling with tenses/wording and forgetting to change a few things. Confusion is never a good thing. :)

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Re: Human (a swear or two)
« Reply #10 on: October 27, 2013, 05:16:05 PM »
Thanks Bri.  Yup, that was me fiddling with tenses/wording and forgetting to change a few things. Confusion is never a good thing. :)

Say nice things to Toop, she spotted it first. Go on . . . say something nice. heh heh. B
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Re: Human (a swear or two)
« Reply #11 on: October 27, 2013, 05:32:00 PM »
Listening to a reviewer is the nicest thing a writer can do. :)

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Re: Human (a swear or two)
« Reply #12 on: October 27, 2013, 08:11:11 PM »
 ;D
Fare thee well Skip. We're all 'Keening' now. xbx

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Re: Human (a swear or two)
« Reply #13 on: October 29, 2013, 07:27:21 PM »
That's a lot of fun, Pale  ;D

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Re: Human (a swear or two)
« Reply #14 on: October 29, 2013, 08:44:14 PM »
Thank you, Jewel. I can't really write flash anymore because I've switched to novel/chapter writing mind-set. When I first started writing I used to write flashes every day challenges. They were great but when world building the lessons they gave me never provided me the knowledge of how to fill in the gaps which flashes allow. So I only write them for the site, for fun. And this was :)