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The subject was the cardinal vices or seven deadly sins. 5 poems to choose from, please pick your favorite.

1. Glutton for Punishment
8 (42.1%)
2. Forty Lines Concerning Sloth, Box Elder Trees and The Inquisition
3 (15.8%)
3. Six plus One
2 (10.5%)
4. I'll Have Yours
2 (10.5%)
5. Rattling Chains
4 (21.1%)

Total Members Voted: 17

Voting closed: September 30, 2013, 09:21:07 AM

Author Topic: VOTING Poetry Challenge #81  (Read 2592 times)

Offline heidi52

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VOTING Poetry Challenge #81
« on: September 23, 2013, 09:21:07 AM »
1   Glutton for Punishment

The emperor let me borrow his robes,
they didn’t fit well
but who could tell under all the finery
and flim-flammery
sound-bite, media spin,
we-love-you-dahling sham-ery?

Until, in answer to the questions
how I was influenced,
who do you write for,
and what is your favourite food,
I answered, bald-faced,
bare-arsed, completely in the nude
unashamed of my nakedness
“I’m just a born writer,”

pause

“I’m a newborn,
wet behind the ears
need my backside slapped
and the cord cut – which of you
would like to wield the knife?”
Silence crept around their ankles
the microphone got passed away
and everyone stared.
I hadn’t followed the script.




2   Forty Lines Concerning Sloth, Box Elder Trees and The Inquisition

1.   You would think there would be a content content
2.   part and parcel to the process of allocating virtue
3.   by the practice of avoiding the practice, as it were,
4.   of the vice of sloth.  But if indeed indolent laxity is,
5.   in and of itself, morally dissatisfactory, then anti-sloth,
6.   or non-sloth, would thus by definition constitute the good, and
7.   seemingly in like manner the Platonically ideally good,
8.   without regard to that about which one would be anti-slothful–  
9.   and so it follows that we identify non-sloth, in consequence,
10.   to contain exclusive constitutive parts of vital activity, active vitality
11.   and the like, and it becomes clear the claim is that this
12.   thusly identified and putatively revered virtue
13.   resides exclusively in the exercise of such vigorous vim  
14.   and in the continuation of the practices of such busyness,
15.   and in all clarity and candor not to any degree residing as such
16.   in the resident goodness vel non of the goal and without expectation
17.   when our thoughts eventually wander to the inevitable questions
18.   of the capacity of this purported virtue to instantiate, to encapsulate
19.   solamente, those precise efforts toward the neutral as winding a rope
20.   then unwinding a rope around the pitted trunk
21.   of a box elder tree at ever increasing rates
22.   to proclaim to all who would consider the matter
23.   to be possessed of burgeoning infusions of virtuousness
24.   and not allow thoughts to traverse those of questions
25.   of the wealth and plentitude of virtues ascribable and ascribed
26.   to those most busily and vigorously engaged in the active pursuits
27.   over the ages in stone caverns and cages and dungeons, arguably
28.   analogous to the box elder revolutions but
29.   without the benignity of spirit or faintly heaving heart,
30.   of the seeking out and indelibly correcting amidst the newly shed blood
31.   by way of physical and corporeal inducements the abrupt jolting  
32.   recantations and newly composed proclamations
33.   of suddenly discovered faith in the original creator of splendor
34.   of such virtue, to such frequency and fervency as to suggest
35.   a last measure, a receipt of virtuousness immeasurable
36.   in purification by fire, and all of this saith, you might think,
37.   by someone in full practice and futile promotion
38.   of the lesser virtue, for private solicitude and in that
39.   thought and regard, for what worth may therein be inherent,
40.   you would be right, gentle reader.  
 


3   Six plus One

Hmm? I see the things I think I need
this is what eventually becomes my Greed.
I'm Envious and Lust after the things I can't do,
I gorge myself heartily on the words of the few.
Gluttony is never a nice thing to see,
but I'll stuff my face anyway,
a marvellous thing for me.
Pride? Well ok, proud I'll be.
But I know that I'm Sloth-full
If I could get my arse off this settee,
I'd rant and I'd rave,
and you'd feel the Wrath of me.



4.    I'll Have Yours

I want what I want
When I want it
I will do what I
Must to have it

Mug you in darkness
Spend your money
A gun to your head
Drive your auto
Poison your large dog
Own all your stuff
Tie you to a chair
Abuse your family

I’ll have what you had
Take what is yours
You’ll be what I was:
Know how that feels.



5   Rattling Chains

Like cool rain fallen upon a dry and barren wilderness.
So to this hunger begin its nocturnal predator’s prowl.
It is a building need— blinding and yet so plain to see.

The wanton creature coils deep inside of dreams.
A diamondback watches within a gold fish bowl.
But can this serpent resist sweet clarity’s call?

Oh, what strange gifts our blind desires bring.
When the captive’s chains sets our souls free.









« Last Edit: September 23, 2013, 09:22:51 AM by heidi52 »

Offline Tom 10

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Re: VOTING Poetry Challenge #81
« Reply #1 on: September 30, 2013, 09:56:08 AM »
Congratulations, Sio, great poem. :) :) :)

Offline 510bhan

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Re: VOTING Poetry Challenge #81
« Reply #2 on: September 30, 2013, 10:03:17 AM »
Thank you! Thanks everyone who voted for it, what a lovely surprise. I've been so busy Muriel-ing I'd forgotten this was due to close.  :D

Yay! ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D

I shall get a new challenge up soon. I hope everyone who entered this one, does the next -- hey, invite a friend to write a poem too. Right, rambling now, must stop. ;)


 :D :D :D :D :D :D


Offline heidi52

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Re: VOTING Poetry Challenge #81
« Reply #3 on: September 30, 2013, 12:43:44 PM »
Thank you all for paying attention! And

**********CONGRATULATIONS 510BHAN************
for another win, I see you have the situation well in hand and have even posted the next challenge.

No flies on you girl!

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Re: VOTING Poetry Challenge #81
« Reply #4 on: September 30, 2013, 12:47:58 PM »
surprise, surprise eh................but congratulations.................
Just a well-read punk peasant

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Offline bri h

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Re: VOTING Poetry Challenge #81
« Reply #5 on: September 30, 2013, 12:48:58 PM »
Hmm, not a good result. Who was it that took my rightful last place from me? Come on? Who was it? heh heh. Great comp Heidi. Well done to everyone who took part including . . . Her!  ::)  ;D ;D ;D ;D Well done Shvon. As usual you so deserve the win. xbx
Fare thee well Skip. We're all 'Keening' now. xbx

Offline Neghe

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Re: VOTING Poetry Challenge #81
« Reply #6 on: September 30, 2013, 12:55:41 PM »

Congrats...SIO !  8)
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Re: VOTING Poetry Challenge #81
« Reply #7 on: September 30, 2013, 01:02:32 PM »
Thanks folks. :D

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Re: VOTING Poetry Challenge #81
« Reply #8 on: September 30, 2013, 02:37:01 PM »
Well done sio.

Offline 510bhan

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Re: VOTING Poetry Challenge #81
« Reply #9 on: September 30, 2013, 02:54:21 PM »
Thanks jewel -- hope to see an entry from you arrive in my in box for the next challenge. ;)

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Re: VOTING Poetry Challenge #81
« Reply #10 on: September 30, 2013, 03:09:12 PM »
Well now... there's plain plane windows that are through and through... wonder if 9mm would do the trick

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Re: VOTING Poetry Challenge #81
« Reply #11 on: September 30, 2013, 03:10:54 PM »
 ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D

So -- no one's going to wander lonely as a cloud in amongst them. Can't wait to read the entries. ;D

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Re: VOTING Poetry Challenge #81
« Reply #12 on: September 30, 2013, 03:38:44 PM »
;D ;D ;D ;D ;D

So -- no one's going to wander lonely as a cloud in amongst them. Can't wait to read the entries. ;D

Maybe we can get Morrissey to throw daffodils while he sings?
"I'm so miserable, I'm a plane-pilot nowwwwwwwwww."  ;D
Fare thee well Skip. We're all 'Keening' now. xbx