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A Dog Person Remembers a Cat
« on: May 18, 2013, 08:48:58 AM »
A Dog Person Remembers a Cat

We mark our places with history.
In the main, important events,
famed names and occupations.
label roads, streets and lanes
but now and again local lore
gives landmarks their nomenclature.
 
With panoramic views
on days graced with clear skies
where otherwise, cows graze
 in year round cloud, Wolf Hill,
where the last wolf in Ireland was killed
looks over Ligoniel
on the back road to Belfast.

Drive from the north side
along Seven Mile Straight
a gradual, casual affair
and keep watch
where dips offer peeks
at passing weasels in dry stone walls
and crests raise the eye
to hawks quartering for mice and frogs.

The gradient, 1:4, ensures downhill
cheap thrills, a chance to freewheel
and fly round perilous bends
catch badgers unaware,
foxes and birds, among common road kill 

and . . .

during the heatwave of 1995
a feline, possibly brown
but blood and matted fur
made it difficult to discern
its original colour.
 
Flat cat, squashed on the tarmac
lasted six weeks before rain came
and washed away what remained
but he lay, splayed out
eye hanging on an optic nerve
like a broken spring
or a limp length of string.

Each day, bits disappeared,
in wheel arches while fresh
stuck to hubcaps and mud flaps
and when desiccated
in the treads of tractor  tyres
lost in the bumps over cattle grids.

His shadowed form, visible from afar
retained its shape apart from the tail,
an early casualty for the corpse of the cat
lying splat, flat
on the left hand side of the road.

For me, the place will always be
Flat Cat Corner. RIP Tabby.


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Re: A Dog Person Remembers a Cat
« Reply #1 on: May 18, 2013, 09:11:44 AM »
I have a problem here shvon. I learned to be semi-critical of poetry, mostly from you. So Maybe I say this in-correctly, but it's not ringing true for me. It's the first part of this. Whenever I see a rhythm in poetry, I get into it and stay there carried along by it. It's there in the first part of S1, but then you drop it. I was wondering why? Is it free verse, so it retains a rhythm to get the particular meaning over, but just for those lines? Let me show you what I mean.

We mark our places with history. [duh duh, duh duh-duh, duh duh-duh-duh]

In the main, important events, [duh duh duh, duh duh-duh, duh duh]
famed names and occupations. [duh duh, duh, duh, duh-duh-duh]
label roads, streets and lanes[ duh duh duh, duh, duh duh.]

Then you drop out and into a different rhythm.
Just need a better understanding of this, tha's all. B
« Last Edit: May 18, 2013, 09:13:41 AM by brianh »
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Re: A Dog Person Remembers a Cat
« Reply #2 on: May 18, 2013, 09:19:02 AM »
The rhythm may well be all over the place, it's not a metered piece, as you noted . . . free verse. ;D I'm not estwg. :D

I pronounce history as his'tree not his-tor-y so the duh-duh-duh would sound duh-duh from me, so no rhythm set up. ;)

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« Reply #3 on: May 18, 2013, 09:23:43 AM »
Ah, I see. Carry on poppet, don't mind me,  ;D
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« Reply #4 on: May 18, 2013, 09:30:21 AM »
 ;D ;D ;D

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famed names and occupations. [duh duh, duh, duh, duh-duh-duh]
would read . . duh duh, duh, duh-duh-duh-duh :D

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Re: A Dog Person Remembers a Cat
« Reply #5 on: May 18, 2013, 11:37:01 AM »
(Sings) "One bad comma don't spoil the whole bunch giiiiiiiiiirl."

desiccated = dessicated   ;D
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Re: A Dog Person Remembers a Cat
« Reply #6 on: May 18, 2013, 11:40:37 AM »
That's what I had spelt it as, but spell check told me differently! ::)

I really should trust myself . . .  :-[

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« Reply #7 on: May 18, 2013, 11:50:09 AM »
If it hadn't been me, it woulda been another on here. Rest easy poppet you're among friends.  :) ;D
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« Reply #8 on: May 18, 2013, 11:52:23 AM »
 ;D ;D ;D ;D So -- any thoughts on the poem at all? Poor old Flat Cat . . .

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Re: A Dog Person Remembers a Cat
« Reply #9 on: May 18, 2013, 11:52:45 AM »
(Sings) "One bad comma don't spoil the whole bunch giiiiiiiiiirl."

desiccated = dessicated   ;D

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/ˈdɛs ɪˌkeɪt/ Show Spelled [des-i-keyt] Show IPA verb, des·ic·cat·ed, des·ic·cat·ing. verb (used with object). 1. to dry thoroughly; dry up. 2. to preserve (food) by ...

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Re: A Dog Person Remembers a Cat
« Reply #10 on: May 18, 2013, 11:54:25 AM »
;D ;D ;D ;D So -- any thoughts on the poem at all? Poor old Flat Cat . . .

Honestly - the subject matter distracted me from the poem itself and I kept wondering - When will someone driving by stop and at the very least, move it off the road?
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Re: A Dog Person Remembers a Cat
« Reply #11 on: May 18, 2013, 12:03:52 PM »
There's no place to stop on the hedge-lined road, folk just whizz past. It's mainly through farm land so just big tractors if it's not speedster commuters, which is why he lay there so long . . . he was pretty much fried into the road. :-[

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« Reply #12 on: May 18, 2013, 12:28:47 PM »
Hmm? Liked it, but is a constant reminder to me of road-kill.
 
One of the occupational-hazards of bein a wagon driver is, you get to see and kill your own on those misty-mornings at stupid o clock. Pigeons with suicidal tendencies fly along the road, slightly in front of your wind-screen, with the terrified driver(me, who hates killing anything needlessly) screaming "FLY LEFT! OR RIGHT! Don't fly in front of me, you're gonna get plastered to me wagon! Weasels, badgers, pheasants and even long-tailed squirrels, seem to wait till just as I'm rounding a bend doing all of thirty miles per hour, to then choose to dart into the middle of the road for a deathly date with 18 tons of wagon.

I've been driving along quietly on country roads crying bitterly to myself for the rabbit I've just plastered all over the road. Very distressing for me. Anyway, I loved this S.

Drive from the north side
along Seven Mile Straight
a gradual, casual affair
and keep watch
where dips offer peeks
at passing weasels in dry stone walls
and crests raise the eye
to hawks quartering for mice and frogs.

Written IMO, beautifully. There. That's how much I liked it. ha ha.
 Lovely evocative words Shvon. xbx
Fare thee well Skip. We're all 'Keening' now. xbx

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Re: A Dog Person Remembers a Cat
« Reply #13 on: May 18, 2013, 12:35:57 PM »
Thanks Bri.  ;)

It's always a tough call when an animal darts in front of your vehicle and there are other motorists behind you. I got a rat once and felt guilty for ages after. I didn't do Flat Cat, he was there one morning on the way to work. We used to go the scenic route rather than face the hassle of the motorway, so we saw him everyday for as long as he lasted.

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Re: A Dog Person Remembers a Cat
« Reply #14 on: May 18, 2013, 09:39:43 PM »
Hi 510ban, I can understand brianh mistake with estwg, you both are friggin awesome!! As always, enjoying your work  ;D